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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2004-12-29 09:53 AM

Bring it blue to me
With B.B. fondling Lucile in a passionate throe
Of eye closing release
     Each forceful pluck one string closer you know
To the edge of oblivion
   And I’ll wrap it up for you
In pages of scribbled notes half finished in rhyme
Or some groping reach to find Persian meter
Of once upon someone’s time

Hell with the constructs
     Dictated by the P O E T R Y police
I’ll find my own lines on the white to write
So close your eyes
                         Or blink twice
Cause when the Blue sits heavy thighs on my lips
Begging the touch of some unknown tongue
  That might sip dew from the cracks

I got no reason to play the same
        Brick brake tune of words that might grace
Some small town memory
       Or to hum anything but the best of vibes
With trembling lips against the reed of her

If it’s true
       Then the south done won after all you know
If it ain’t
                    Then Billie lied before she tasted too much
And her passing don’t mean a thing
Just like mine won’t
                 When you’ve forgotten how it was to feel
The drop to bass and the rhythm of drums
  Played on skin with lights low
          Embracing too many deaths you already had
Looking for one more
                    To put you in the realms of ecstasy

So bring it to me blue

                        And I’ll listen while you

Sing some sad notes or simple cry the tears
      Bottled up inside for aging
                   And when you are through

I’ll spit the notes of you from my tongue
      And mix them with the ashes
Of what you burned
                 To stain again some indecent lines
On this the blue
                              Of paper white

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

1 posted 2004-12-29 09:56 AM

uh huh...yep....
between the lines
a four letter f word

(fine) is whispered

kewl c man

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2004-12-29 10:02 AM

thank you sir... not sure about the four letter word in there if it is fine or or fake...lol...

your eyes are always appreciated ...

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2004-12-29 10:06 AM

Hell with the constructs
     Dictated by the P O E T R Y police
I’ll find my own lines on the white to write
So close your eyes
                         Or blink twice
Cause when the Blue sits heavy thighs on my lips
Begging the touch of some unknown tongue
  That might sip dew from the cracks

I got no reason to play the same

~*~

The four letter f word has been expanded to read "fantastic!"

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

4 posted 2004-12-29 10:08 AM

Yes..... the South definitely won that round....and some others.

This is so smooth, like the virtuosity it shows....Jazz does have two meanings....one of which is (fine), and the other, (!) the other.....and your jazz? Oh yeah.....

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2004-12-29 10:28 AM

Ms Sunshine... you're being kind ma'am... just a few drops of spittle here mixed with the ashes of a few tunes... trying to make my own ink...

Ed... sir... you are exceedingly kind... and patient to continue to read my meager droppings here...

I appreciate the eyes..and the read

thanks all... your time and your eyes are appreciated..

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2004-12-29 10:49 AM

So bring it to me blue

                        And I’ll listen while you

Sing some sad notes or simple cry the tears
      Bottled up inside for aging
                   And when you are through

I’ll spit the notes of you from my tongue
      And mix them with the ashes
Of what you burned
                 To stain again some indecent lines
On this the blue
                              Of paper white

Even though I can't always find the words sufficient enough to reply to your wonderful writes here on the blue...I still love reading them. And, though my "blues" don't sound nearly as good as yours, I sure do feel them sometimes.
Hugs,
Ethel

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2004-12-29 10:51 AM

Oh, my... oh my oh my oh my...

Your poetry always impresses me... today, it's absolutely blowing me away... and here... gives me music along with the words.

Fantastic, indeed!!! *S*

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

8 posted 2004-12-29 11:00 AM

"I’ll spit the notes of you from my tongue
      And mix them with the ashes
Of what you burned
                 To stain again some indecent lines
On this the blue
                              Of paper white"

Ah...this is forceful..

and I love forceful.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
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9 posted 2004-12-29 12:17 PM

That's easy -- I think you're one of the best, if not the best, singers in this choir....

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______________Ratleader______________

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

10 posted 2004-12-29 03:22 PM

oooh.

Can you play the slide with a longneck too?

Now you knew I'd show up for this...

off to sell my soul at the crossroads now.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

11 posted 2004-12-29 03:26 PM

I recall once you saying you enjoyed the blues.....
but...I enjoy it when you enjoy the blue even more.

oh yes.....F is the word....FRIGGIN great....

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

12 posted 2004-12-29 05:11 PM

Ron

"So bring it to me blue

                        And I’ll listen while you

Sing some sad notes or simple cry the tears
      Bottled up inside for aging
                   And when you are through

I’ll spit the notes of you from my tongue"

Okay...I can do this!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

13 posted 2004-12-29 06:21 PM

Yah'll's ink, Suh...
is most desahedly blew-bluhd...

Spit ah li'l moh.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

14 posted 2004-12-30 05:33 AM

so enjoyed

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

15 posted 2004-12-30 03:05 PM

"Cause when the Blue sits heavy thighs on my lips
Begging the touch of some unknown tongue
  That might sip dew from the cracks

I got no reason to play the same
        Brick brake tune of words that might grace
Some small town memory
       Or to hum anything but the best of vibes
With trembling lips against the reed of her"

Fantastic!!

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

16 posted 2004-12-30 04:46 PM

Friggin’ fantastic!
Enjoyed!!

JL

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

17 posted 2004-12-30 07:07 PM

One word..Wow!!

believe in what your heart feels...

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

18 posted 2004-12-31 11:01 PM

what a sweet taste
*sighs*
eyes and thighs in synch

smiling, hearing Miss Billie in this

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

19 posted 2005-01-01 01:39 AM

Really heard the soul in this. Thanks for sharing this terrific piece.

....jo

J.Samm
Member

since 2004-01-12

Posts 415
Iloilo City, Philippines

20 posted 2005-01-01 02:05 AM

wow, this is so much fun...i don't exactly love the poetry police very much either

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