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day after night after day (lighthouse series scene 13)
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day after night after day (lighthouse series scene 13) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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they gather here, these human shapes with ship-wrecked eyes and faces carved like stone they think me dormant and do not see my eyes have light in this prehistoric sky their mouths, too busy and hooked in the throb of genitalia and the swell of fish thigh high and trembling this is my life, i suppose - and for me it is long and moaning day after night after day watching ghost ships in the fog and humans copulate like dogs into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I am tucking this one into my library...sheesh woman! I always enjoy reading you  awesome! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ship-wrecked eyes *sigh* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sounds of waves slapping logs of the pier and you found the wash underneath... well done, Maree! Ah, this series, for the book, yes? |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I see them! I SEE them! The imagery in this poem is simply incredible....reading it is like looking at a clear sharp picture, that morphs into another, then another....it would have been absolutely riveting even if the theme of it didn't rattle my cage! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree "day after night after day watching ghost ships in the fog and humans copulate like dogs" Such fabulous personification....got me thinking about what it would be like, no...not to be a lighthouse, you've got that covered, but something.  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
day after night after day watching ghost ships in the fog and humans copulate like dogs wow!! what a look through those eyes you've given us down below; and to think, that boy promised me no one would see us under the boardwalk  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Can't let this one slip by. You have to knit these all together one day, so we might read them one after the other. Did I mention they are wondermuss! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
they think me dormant and do not see my eyes have light in this prehistoric sky An impressive creation! Sending love to you, highly talented Poetess! Margherita |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Awesome write!! I enjoyed this... ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
::shaking head::: yeah... what Ed Said.... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
yes. superb. masterful. I would love to see them all together as well.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
damn woman! pickin my jaw up. Every time I click on your name I am never, ever disapointed. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
they think me dormant and do not see my eyes have light you never do know who is watching . . . what a perspective, Maree and I agree with Ed . . . please put these together . . . |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I want to thank you all for your kind replies I appreciate them and you all so very much. "Knit these all together" one day? Hmmmm, soon perhaps. Thank's all  Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"ship-wrecked eyes" That's one of those images I know very well, and didn't know that I knew it until just now. M'lady is artiste. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
I'm a baboon for good poetry and especially poetry about lighthouses and so I went back to read the other eleven (couldn't find 12, yet) and I do like this portrayal of the Lighthouse the very very best. I love how grandiose, weather worn, indestructible, and eternal the Lighthouse stands in relationship to us mere mortals... and the love making scene is pretty darn good too. (Smiles) Enjoyed reading this series very much. -Bob |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Maree, you are the sea! No, you are the lighthouse. No, you are one fine poet! Happy holidays! .....jo |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
... JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sweet lady, I sure did think that I had read this, but I don't see where I replied. this is excellent writing, just as all yours are. Here's a sigtag that I made a few days ago. I thought that it went very well with your poem. Hugs, Ethel  |
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