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Soulfisher
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where ever the fly fishing is good

0 posted 2005-02-05 07:09 AM

HAIKU
ANCIENT RIVER REED
RED CINNAMON STALKED ADORNED
IN GOLDEN TASSELS

DODOITSU
WASHING WATERS FLOWING SLOW
DRAWING IN CLOSER MY SOUL
AS MARTYRDOMS DRAWING CLOSE
HOMEWARD I DRIFT SLOW

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

1 posted 2005-02-05 11:04 AM

Both poems are so very, very lovely. I had not heard of a dodoitsu before. Thank your for introducing me to a new Japanese poetic form!

Happy fishing and flying!
EA

Susan
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walking the surreal

2 posted 2005-02-05 12:23 PM

Most excellent -

Susan

*Alli4000*

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3 posted 2005-02-05 03:44 PM

Enjoyed this!

~Alli~

*AIM = Alli4000* Journal!

Snow

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4 posted 2005-02-05 04:00 PM

nice to see someone else writing dodoitsu.

Soulfisher
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5 posted 2005-02-05 05:48 PM

EARTH ANGEL TO TELL YOU THE TRUTH I DIDNT KNOW THERE WAS A DODOITSU UNTIL LAST NIGHT WHEN I WAS TRYING TO DEFINE SENRYU. HOPEFULY I GOT BOTH FORMS RIGHT.

SUSAN AND ALLI4000 THANK YOU BOTH FOR READING AND REPLYING

SNOW THANK YOU FOR READING AND I WILL BE LOOKING FOR YOUR DODOITSU'S

Midnitesun

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Gaia

6 posted 2005-02-05 07:37 PM

Bravo for you! The Japanese forms are some of my favorites, and the Dodoitsu has been a popular folk music form. Thanks for sharing this!
FYI, who wish wish to understand, the "dodo" as I call it (LOL) often has love or humor as its theme, and is traditonally an unrhymed set of 4 lines, in a 7,7,7,5 syllable format, used in some Japanese folk music I heard in the early 60's. It is not written or performed too often by American writers.

to this brave writer!

Soulfisher
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7 posted 2005-02-05 08:23 PM

MIDNITESUN THANK YOU FOR YOUR READ AND COMMENTS. BUT THE 60'S, HUH WHAT WAS THAT LIKE?

Midnitesun

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Gaia

8 posted 2005-02-05 08:50 PM

LOL, dynamic, ever changing...and often quite fun

I 'grew up' in the 60's, with a lot of Japanese friends in California, then studied Asian lit in college.
As for this form in music, go back even further, and listen to Mikimatsu (I think that's the spelling)
gotta love the internet! here, I found him! just follow this link: http://jtrad.columbia.jp/eng/u_dodoitsu.html

Soulfisher
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9 posted 2005-02-05 09:00 PM

MIDNITE YOU HAVEN'T BEEN LISTENING SINCE 1901 HAVE YOU?LOL

Margherita
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Eternity

10 posted 2005-02-05 09:05 PM

Well done and captivating in content.

Love, Margherita

Midnitesun

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Gaia

11 posted 2005-02-05 09:53 PM

LOL, no, began listening mid century though LOL

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