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Old Love |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk 
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Years passed since you and i were; together amongst the stars hung between the moon. shadowed cloaked in darkness fear bloomed where no-man had tread love i felt was true. Sheltered were our lifes to be, Safeness felt warmer everything became nothing, yet nothing was everything. addicted to those everlasting moments no pictures framed hand held in hand were dreams yet you wrote the words. The end seemed to sudden trampled were my bed of roses bravery overlooked the view from all angles and above you and i were never meant to be still wasnt there love and out of love i called the end so you could have it all. Might of seemed the harsh way of telling you to go start the family that i would never know. And all my days i think of you counting all the memories you'll look back and think of me giving into love. |
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Fariegirl Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 147 |
I really liked this. You might want to work on the ending just a little bit, but other that that, it was very very good. -Kat |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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