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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2004-12-14 09:04 AM


Enchantment falling
Wonders anticipated
Diamonds careen

Delicate lighting
Magnificence magnified
Winter’s wonderment

Shimmering sequins
Maniacal mannequins
Snowbound silhouettes

Calendar cavorts
Hibernation’s happenstance
Never plan winter…

© Copyright 2004 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
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1 posted 2004-12-14 09:35 AM

Beautiful Kari!!!

You and anyone else can feel free to send pictures of snow directly to my email, because I am missing it this year!!!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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Canada eh.
2 posted 2004-12-14 10:00 AM

Beautiful Karilea...
Wonderful alliterations and imagery...much enjoyed!!

     Season's Greetings!

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Member Patricius
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just out of reach
3 posted 2004-12-14 10:22 AM

Beautiful indeed !!  hugs, Chris

Don't forget my presents!!

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Lost in thought
4 posted 2004-12-14 10:31 AM

I love the snow!
Hope we get some here this year...
Great words

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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walking the surreal
5 posted 2004-12-14 10:36 AM

sigh snow glimmer tears
'tis that wonder time of year
when diamonds fall

Lovely your words - like the kiss of winter itself -

Hugs - Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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6 posted 2004-12-14 11:03 AM

Beautiful, sissie!  Almost as pretty as the sunshine here!!  
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7 posted 2004-12-14 04:07 PM

Beneath it all, flowers rest
In bed, under thick blankets

Very nice, Karilea...The picture is beautiful as well are the poems...


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8 posted 2004-12-14 04:17 PM

Yet another style you have mastered
with such grace.


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9 posted 2004-12-14 04:52 PM

How very lovely! *S* Somehow, cold rain just doesn't inspire quite as well! *S*
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10 posted 2004-12-14 07:48 PM

Beautiful, the words
Written in cold of winter
Winter wonderland
passing shadows
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11 posted 2004-12-18 09:31 AM


I wish one day of snow here, but I doubt that will happen

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12 posted 2004-12-18 10:39 AM

I'm a fan of anything like a haiku, and preferably in big bunches....a drift of senryu snow would warm me for sure....and this one did!

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>

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13 posted 2004-12-18 10:57 PM

Agreed with everyone else - this is a fantastic write!


Happy Holidays!

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14 posted 2004-12-19 07:04 AM

Enchanting, dear Karilea!

Oh, I want that picture to materialize and to walk in that silence!

Love, Margherita

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15 posted 2004-12-19 08:33 AM

All great! Hard to pick a favorite...thought it was the 2nd one and then I read on. Some wonderful images and use of language.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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Malta (tiny island in the Med)
16 posted 2004-12-19 08:36 AM

loved your words.....they make me wish it snowed on my island of Malta !
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17 posted 2004-12-19 08:48 AM

Many of your writings convey a great peace.  All of these do and remind of the purpose of this season.  Peace to you, my friend.  Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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18 posted 2004-12-19 08:54 AM

Beautiful expressions of a season of chilled beauty.

believe in what your heart feels...

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19 posted 2004-12-19 07:59 PM

Very well done Sun.  You paint the portrait
well.  Happy holidays dear one.

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20 posted 2004-12-19 08:02 PM

Beautiful Senryu's Kari and such a pretty pic, one day perhaps I'll experience snow at Christmas time..sigh.


into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

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21 posted 2004-12-19 10:10 PM

This is so beautiful, Karilea!
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A Mountain Paradise
22 posted 2004-12-19 10:13 PM

These were wonderful and I enjoyed them so much. It's snowing here tonight and my little piece of the world looks so beautiful.

hugs, Marti

A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows.
–St. Francis of Assisi

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Beneath the northern stars
23 posted 2004-12-19 11:18 PM

*shivers* We don't have any snow in MN this year (can you BELIEVE it??), so thanks for sending us a bit of it from your part of the world, Karilea!!


Have a Holly Jolly Christmas! Jesus is the reason for the season!!

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24 posted 2004-12-20 11:00 AM

nice write
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25 posted 2004-12-20 12:19 PM

"Calendar cavorts ......... Never plan winter."  Perfect! Bob
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