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gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2004-12-08 01:08 AM

I am the elder flower
dried and torn
among the pages

And pollen, my love
is drawn from my breast
a pregnant sigh

across the hours I have known.

So
I never inhale
for too long

for the way I want you
is vindictive to my passive pretense

and they fly past
Every time
to newborn lilies
and waiflike thorns.

An insignificant death
in the morning black

a loss
for yet another moon

~You have not yet opened petal lashes
Iris of golden blue
to blink

~drink the sunlight enough to see

I am before you

every dark morning pause

ticking over....

He loves me
He loves me not....

Picking myself apart.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2004-12-08 05:32 AM

gemma, awesome!

love that ending!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2004-12-08 07:50 AM

And pollen, my love
is drawn from my breast
a pregnant sigh

across the hours I have known.

So
I never inhale
for too long

for the way I want you
is vindictive to my passive pretense

and they fly past
Every time
to newborn lilies
and waiflike thorns.

An insignificant death
in the morning black

a loss
for yet another moon

~You have not yet opened petal lashes
Iris of golden blue
to blink
==================

outstanding use of imagery, metaphor, theme and personification in this Gemma girl...

across the hours I have known.
~~~
a loss
for yet another moon

I just love those lines...
a hauntingly lovely write poetess Gem.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2004-12-08 08:50 AM

Gemma~

Nice to see you!

I couldn't say it better than JM if I tried.

Outstanding!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

4 posted 2004-12-08 09:39 AM

Ever notice that the petals get smaller as we approach our hearts?
     Maybe we just don't give ourselve's the time to heal ...

           ... magical words my friend.

                                 *S

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2004-12-08 04:13 PM

Haunting in it's beauty..
Excellent write Gemma!
Hugs~

~ Let peace begin with me... ~

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