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~eternal child~
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since 2004-11-23
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0 posted 2004-12-03 11:47 PM



shape me
a moment
as i’m afraid
to touch

i hide my eyes
in sigh

with all that
is burning
blue

and i ache
the wet mouth
of you



© Copyright 2004 ~eternal child~ - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
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1 posted 2004-12-04 12:11 PM


Nice...now I'm thinking about my girlfriend....James
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2004-12-04 09:10 AM



There is a reshaping
that follows
on the heels of
your request...



Enjoyed this brief excerpt of need...

thank you!

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
3 posted 2004-12-04 10:30 AM


My thoughts exactly!!


M

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2004-12-04 10:45 AM


eternal child,
Quite childish LOL enjoyed.

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2004-12-04 12:22 PM


wow! I like this!
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6 posted 2004-12-04 02:38 PM


Very nice write Eternal Child! Enjoyed~

~Alli~

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Enchantress
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Canada eh.
7 posted 2004-12-04 07:05 PM


Very much enjoyed this piece...well done!
Hugs~

~ Let peace begin with me... ~

Kethry
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Victoria Australia
8 posted 2004-12-04 07:37 PM


you are shapely enough, the poem was an added bonus.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
9 posted 2005-01-13 11:04 AM


"and i ache
the wet mouth
of you"


...a desirable ache creating a poem that lingers on my tongue.

JL
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since 2004-04-01
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Texas, USA
10 posted 2005-01-13 11:11 AM


Very nice visual.

JL

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
11 posted 2005-01-14 12:18 PM


desire...

short but full of emotion, well done

garysgirl
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12 posted 2005-01-14 12:27 PM


and i ache
the wet mouth
of you


oh yes, I know this feel whenever my Honey-Love
is there and I am here.
Hugs,
Ethel


iliana
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13 posted 2005-01-14 12:45 PM


and i ache
the wet mouth
of you

Now, that is one fabulous line of poetry!

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