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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
These dark stones broken Are shattered shards of night Older still than the hand that placed them here In circle drawn rough on earth I would howl their grief Amber eyed But he who looked inside me Saw too I knew And needed not to hear my cry To come and stand in shadows As I laid fire to the center Watching flames reflect no light Off surfaces roughly polished Or warmth come from embers That glowed grey against my heart Re-arranged To hide the stains left before They lie still sharp to silence Innocence Scratched deep in veins Is written of old blood And skins worn against the flames As sweat poured from both of us And I found the fire cooler Than the lust you brought To flesh rubbed with wild grass While he who looked into me Raised his head to call Some brethren faded far into time Ending his trailed notes In short whimpered whine That made my own tears know They too fell fey Among the bright stones of sky |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron I like the feel of this....lots!  |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
From the primeval to the present, the howl remains the same. A comfort to the pack. A chill to those outside of it. Well done!!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
These dark stones broken Are shattered shards of night Older still than the hand that placed them here In circle drawn rough on earth I would howl their grief Amber eyed But he who looked inside me Saw too I knew And needed not to hear my cry To come and stand in shadows ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Re-arranged To hide the stains left before They lie still sharp to silence ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ While he who looked into me Raised his head to call Some brethren faded far into time Ending his trailed notes In short whimpered whine That made my own tears know They too fell fey Among the bright stones of sky ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ OH MAN.............. oh my.......... (ya know that question I asked ya?) me thinks you just answered it.......... damn......... Innocence Scratched deep in veins Is written of old blood And skins worn against the flames double damn........  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I would howl their grief Amber eyed But he who looked inside me Saw too I knew And needed not to hear my cry ~*~ Three of my favorite poets echoed thoughts I had yet to make... until just now... Thank you for this, today. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
WIHWT? Well, it's not like I haven't tried once or twice. I just happen to like the way yours lights up the cave. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
this quickens the blood, chief... felt this in the pores... **babyblu** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
pssssssssssst "you write the mysteries" *smile* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Well, let's see....I'm due for a lesson in poetry, and overdue for a dose of humility....yep, time for one by the Captain.... Yep number two: Yep, I'm writing this BEFORE I read the poem. May as well, I know without looking that it's going to be masterful! Now I go enjoy, then relate, then absorb as much quality as I can hold..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ratleader said it right.. Masterful! Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
And I found what I expected....brilliance, as beautifully formed and balanced as a Fabrege' egg....of course. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Like Ratleader said, I knew before I read your poem that it would be excellent. I wasn't wrong. And, as others said...I really FELT this one Capt. Ron. Thank you. Hugs,  |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
"These dark stones broken Are shattered shards of night" ... and I knew I'd love it after reading this. And I do! No surprise, though.  Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
glad i came back. missed all these great writings. thanks for sharing |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I read...I absorb |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Amazing write. ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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