Open Poetry #34 |
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Is that you? |
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poe Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 180Heading to China ![]() |
It all comes into perspective The sanding slowy falling down Who why and when did this come to be One having to realize in the strangest circumstances The point fell through long ago Pain a brush stroke on the canvas of life The truth is always the same no matter the game Everyone searching, hoping they will finally find that unattainable thing The footsteps are all our own This cricle seems to get smaller with each passing day Looking into the void Discussing what is there When we all wear the same blindfold It is all done in the name of something Yet it all stems from this illusion This one shared delusion Tears shall fall like the rain A cosmos to behold Yet a glass marble is where the mind rests Do you know you anymore Or is has the paint become to thick Tomorrow comes for those who fear it. |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
fixing the typo at the end would help the flow, Poe, but I did enjoy pondering the thoughts you presented, which now requires a second cup of java for a second read |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Nice! This really makes you stop and think. I know that a lot of poets don't like punctuation, but I feel that I would have understood it a little better with punctuation than without. quatro |
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*Alli4000*![]()
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Very nice write Poe! ![]() ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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poe Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 180Heading to China |
Midnitesun, Thank You for your input Midnite, it is muchly appreciated. I usually just write raw. That is why spelling and punctuation are no the greatest. I am just trying to get the thought on the paper. I am glad that it made you stop and ponder. quatro, I am glad that it made you stop and think. *Alli4000*, Thank You Alli. Tomorrow comes for those who fear it. |
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