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When Blue Eyes Cried
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When Blue Eyes Cried |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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I sat, silently listening as sapphire eyes spoke of yesterday light flickered, a fond remembrance found soft recall and for a moment a smile lightning flashed, sapphire turned cobalt the feeling somehow had become unfamiliar to him and the smile; foreign to a face now weathered and weary with the passing of time. My chest was heavy with weight of emotions flooding over me as hope and hopelessness cut deep into my heart. Such pain, I had never felt... Such beauty, I had never seen... Such love, I had never known... until that day when blue eyes cried. The greatest beauty on earth, is found in the hearts of those who love.... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
hmmm....have me thinking and feeling this morning, Donna hugs M |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
sometimes you have to take those moments that touch and hold them closely and cherish them. It was that kind of moment.  The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
speaking of depth...  |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Interesting to see an image in words - quite haunting really Dave |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lady,  you make me smile.  Dave, thank you. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
to really see the images, for me generated much more. A great lesson of compassion and forgiveness.....wonderful writing my friend. Enjoyed this mucho much! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Incredible - Donna - just a great big "Wow!" Hugs this morning -  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Danna, this touches one deeply...awesome write! Very much enjoyed..well done! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Let peace begin with me... ~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Thank you much ladies...I'm trying to stretch my poetic horizons...  lol...Hugs. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
until that day when blue eyes cried. ************* stunning scribe, Gentle Spirit... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Donna, you are becoming one amazing poetess! Your writing is so emotive ~ so very expressive ~ and graceful. It reflects your gentle spirit. A moment to be remembered and so eloquently shared. Love ya! Linda |
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stevebrklynnyc Member
since 2004-01-04
Posts 292GA, Camden |
So many great lines, loved every one. Thanks. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Donna this was beautiful and my fav: "My chest was heavy with weight of emotions flooding over me as hope and hopelessness cut deep into my heart." "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
beautiful expressed emotional piece Hope |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Oh Donna, this was a magnificent write that even after reading it again this evening evokes images and thoughts. Thank you for this; I really loved it, hugs, Marti A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow... ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I could feel and see this write... ~C~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I always like to make sure I let a poet know when I feel they have strectched the poetic horizons and in this piece you have done so. I really like this style on you and the piece was done remarkably well. The line breaks were proper, the tone hit just right, and it flowed smoothly. Just enough said and nothing less. I commend you on your accomplishment with this piece. |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Strong, meaningful and heartfelt......very balanced... My chest was heavy Oh yes!!!! ~P |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Such pain, I had never felt... Such beauty, I had never seen... Such love, I had never known... until that day when blue eyes cried. sigh absolutely lovely Donna Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I just wanted to stop in quickly this morning to say thanks to each of you and hopefully I can get back in later today to thank each of you individually but until then I want each of you to know how special your replies and support are to me. Thanks and HUGS The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GentleSpirit~ What a joy to read something so lovely~  You word-touched the 'moment' tenderly~ Love ya', sweetie~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Margie,  too. Thanks for sharing the moment.My thanks to all. |
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