Open Poetry #34 |
a breathing mystery. |
exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
the music in your words comes as a surprise because your eyes are silent to me you're related to the night and cloaked in mystery love is your pulse you play the instrument of life with nothing but your breath the girls you once knew are on a first name basis with heartache but oblivious is your middle name your past is as unknown as your present and your love is just as foreign you keep the world on your shoulders but never show a hint of it painting masks is a talent your pen is your wand your words the magic and your spells are your verses to melt a jaded heart is your specialty and to create them comes with no charge walking contradiction |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
“a breathing mystery” “walking contradiction” Wow! Delightful poem. Filled with depth and understanding. Enjoyed mucho! JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know someone just like that! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
you know, when you learn to identify like this, one can only feel sorrow for this lonely soul, this taker of hearts...who is and always will be the looser in so many ways effecting his/her life in very bad ways...I pray these takers realize the harm they're doing...and all because they have an insatiable desire to fill they're egos...due to a loss of something, in their childhoods? I feel badly for the souls they harm,,,but I can't imagine, what a lonely life they must truly live...think about it? What do they really accomplish? You have certainly described this poor poor soul to the hilt. I wish all people of this nature could see....and change...I really do...cuz killing innocence, belief, faith, also kills their own soul two fold? The hard part is, you can't change them, or talk to them, unless they are able to identify their own flaws and seek the guidence they're path requires to change. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
beautiful and with much depth Chelsea. Well done. |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
A very powerful poem, my dear. This is by far my favorite of yours. It is brimming with emotion and raw in it's context. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Remember, many are not of that nature. Love is not something you tolerate, it's something that feeds on love returned. No more, no less. I applaud this one! Your true God-given talent really shined through on this one. Write more! Write more! Kevin |
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