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Open Poetry #34

Betrayal

marcel
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since 2003-03-02

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az, usa

0 posted 2004-11-28 02:38 AM

Betrayal

Petals from roses, drop one by one
When the warmth of the sun betrays;
Similar are the loving lips of a man,
That can corrupt the most beautiful of flowers.

Marcel

~DreamChild~
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in your dreams

1 posted 2004-11-28 02:42 AM

oooooh..... lovely!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

2 posted 2004-11-28 05:10 AM

damn good write

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

3 posted 2004-11-28 07:41 AM

Ah Keith...a lot implied with very few words!

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2004-11-28 09:24 AM

Oh I love the way your wrote this Keith.
The risk is always there, but so too is the very sun that nourishes the rose.

Smiles,
TD

*Alli4000*

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5 posted 2004-11-28 02:41 PM

Short, but amazing!

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

JL
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since 2004-04-01

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Texas, USA

6 posted 2004-11-30 02:19 PM

To the point.

Great write

JL

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