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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal 
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The saloon is dark Filled with the sensual Pretty legs and lusty busts The rin tin tinkle of piano keys Playing honky tonk spill Drink up – have your fill The amber flows never ending Smoke in the air swirls Riddle spun signals And the bar tender just grins ‘tis a nether world to the uninitiated A tainted bordello of sin But life smells real in the four door open One need only step on in Take a ride on the wild side Com’on, I’ll pour you a gin s.a.t. Just remembering a brief introduction when I was young to a side of life of which I knew nothing - a dive in Louisianna where a woman in our party recived a pair of brass knuckles with a switch blade for her birthday and was thrilled - what an experience -  Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
but it is difficult to find a really good honky tonk piano player Dave |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Very descriptive and capturing a unique moment. Well done! Eric |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
enjoyed the read |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Excellent writing, Susan. I don't know why, but it kind of made me think of an old western movie in a saloon. LOL I used to love the part of Gunsmoke that had Miss Kitty in it. LOL Hugs,  |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Nicely written Susan...enjoyed~ ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you all - I am glad you enjoyed - yes it is a mix of the dive and an old west saloon - am glad that mood came through - Hugs - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
too bad you are attached sounds like my kind of place if ya wanna tag along? shhhh I won't tell if you won't I think I have been there too or worked there perhaps |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This would not be where you first got into the Tool Lady routine, would it? Cute write, very visual....been there, but not often...nor for very long....... |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Smiling - thanks friends - D- I bet you do know the place -  see ya after five -Barry - have always had the tool fascination - this was some long lost relatives I visited - a cousin that took me out in Shreveport (sp?) - he was quite the character - I was 19 at the time -shhhhh - don't tell -  Hugs all - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Oh yeah, reminds me of Morgan City (NSC), actually more like Grand Isle. Anyway Great write. Enjoyed. JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
liked the feel of this |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Good good write Susan, thank you for sharing the memories.... |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you, I am happy that you all have enjoyed this - it was fun to write - Hugs and Morning to all - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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