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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Last night it tried to snow And when eyes closed I dreamed of wild poppies growing on stone So harsh that shattered petal lay profuse Under sparse green As steel wool clouds scoured The breast of dawn till milk rose To lay on streaked red While I with spade dug heavy wet earth One turning ten Till water bled from her skin Leaving me to wear that which she shed In heavy footed hold Unable to move And the sky Tried again |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh save her! dang it... this has such appeal... for anyone who knows the pull of emotion... Excellent work here, sir, now excuse me before I start to blather just to have you undermine my sentiments.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat, Beautiful write, enjoyed. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
powerfully moving piece, Chief **babyblu** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Powerfully moving, to ditto all the above you have a very colorful brush.... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Again your pen has written perfection. Well done sir. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron Yes you can write!!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Ron! Thank you Sir! ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Eccelento, I think that's how they say it in italian..Excellent! Magnifico! and Sir? hush  Mxx  into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. ~Sarah McLachlan~ |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
I felt the chill... believe in what your heart feels... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
" As steel wool clouds scoured The breast of dawn till milk rose To lay on streaked red" Such sadness in a script of dawn. sometimes you worry me.  |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
As steel wool clouds scoured The breast of dawn till milk rose To lay on streaked red And as I read this, I was wishing I could describe this - I've tried - often. Wow. Thank you for sharing this. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Ya know, there is an over-the-counter remedy or two for that . . . but only if you really need the sleep, of course. Colorful, this. Enjoyed. e |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Last night it tried to snow And when eyes closed I dreamed of wild poppies growing on stone So harsh that shattered petal lay profuse Under sparse green As steel wool clouds scoured The breast of dawn till milk rose To lay on streaked red ====================================== pure unadulterated poetic gold.... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
yep, 'poetic gold'....couldn't have described your writing with words a hundred fold...... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
and the sky tried again. this is proof of why I get excited when I see your name..."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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