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A Step In Time. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665
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Like an eye narrowing, frosted with ice. Fog, freezing the view, hanging grey shrouds. Sinister were the trees, metamorphed from summer, leaves blacken, rot, in wet breathlike wind, drear. Walking into the dark shadow of an Oak, step out into a darkly gothic scene. Where is this place, i thought? How did i arrive here? Dark and dolefull were the early afternoon skies of winter. Towering in the foreground, the black house contrasted with the glowing of newly fallen, sparkling snow. A ring of black, surrounded the house. Thick, sharp brambles formed around me in silhouette. Pale scarlet the sky turned, massive gothic arches of the house, stared out at me like eyes, watching. Opening, the houses mouth throws diffused light from the doorway, i walk and stand in the light, cast onto the snow. An inner voice, sweet as angels calling from their celestial plain, beckons me enter. Entering from without, light beamed onto me. Sensations of joy, of love, deep beyond compare. Stepping through the cavernous house, light to the step, i entered a room by a bright yellow door, bathed by sunlight. Windows squared and tall, blasted beauty to the backs of my eyes, nowhere was there snow, but rolling fields of corn. Turning to see a skylark in the clear sky, it's song was deafening, inducing tears of uncontrolable joy. The hissing corn, like from a giant train. Thousands of birds flew over, animals, foxes, badgers, deer, rabbits, creatures sleek and pristeen, shone with divine love. More voices called me away, moving upstairs, along a spiral case, i entered a room from a Terquoise door, and the sea crashed in my skull. Shrieking gull calls, liquid sound of water, as i peered out, the purple black sea rose and towered with white surf teeth. Lightening lit the room in blinding flashes, waves washed high against the windows, then i could see fish in millions. Leaping from the inky blue, a whale sent water arching in white foam peaks, before loudly smashing it's tail onto the surface. Once more the voices called, i complied and moved to the next room. Behind a sage green door, the windows showed more. Howling and echoing, monkeys called in the canopy. Streams softly meandered like silken ribbons, edged by vibrant butterflies. Mist blocked the full strength of the suns rays, jaguars sleekly moved in the dense cover, while orchids of beauty wonderous grew. Suddenly the room fell back, i turned to look, only the dry dark house remained, pale moonlight beamed silver in the empty room. Stepping again into the snow, borealis flew overhead like ghosts, reflected by the green-blue colour, a new path was visable in the snow. Taking the path to darkness, i stepped behind the shadow of a yew in the moonlight, back to the swirling leaves of autumn. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GoldenRose~ 'Sinister were the trees, metamorphed from summer' WOW ! What a poem/story~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Wow! No, Triple WOW! I think you may have outdone yourself with this one! A phenomenally captivating story! I lived every scene as it was vividly portrayed! Excellent piece of creative writing! Love & Light, Linda |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
OUTSTANDING! The story of the poem grabbed me and held me close to hear and see every detail,it was like I was seeing your dreams inside your head. I love the fantasy, magical, imaginitive feel you expressed to the reader.... This one was brilliant!!!!!!!!!!  LOVE~ARH (VQ) Come,love all of me, mind, body, spirit..feel my passion, taste of me, be filled completely! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is longer than your usual! much enjoyed! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!!! An amazing write..very much enjoyed!!! Brava for this masterpiece. ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Marge... Thank you for the kind comments, much appreciated, and very pleased you enjoyed.... Goldenrose. Linda....Thank you for your kind words and enthusiasm. So pleased you enjoyed reading. Goldenrose. ARH (VQ)....The story started by walking on a cold sunday afternoon, seeing the trees blackened in the misty and foggy light, and changed direction suddenly. It was going to be a gothic piece, but turned to twist what you thought the house was going to be like inside,just shows, you cannot judge things or people from outward impressions. So very happy that the fantasy, magic and dreams came silently to visit you. Thank you VQ... Love Goldenrose.xxxxxxxx Dixie.... Yes it is a little longer, maybe i should write more longer poetry? Very glad you enjoyed and glad it helped take you mind off your thoughts for a while...thank you.. Goldenrose. Nancy...Thank you for your kind words, very pleased you enjoyed... Goldenrose. |
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