Color Of Deceit {a rambling rant}

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Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

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0 posted 2004-11-18 01:30 PM

You tossed your cloak
tinted in betrayal
there by the doorway
and stepped into
the suite of
domestic stability,
all the while wearing
that sly fox grin.

You wore your cunning well
     for awhile
until it wore thin
and the fabric of you
        showed through
leaving nothing more
than frayed remnants
of who you
seduced me into
     believing
            that you were,

but like all things that
no longer shine
I discarded the gem
that had long since
lost it's polish and
turned         dull,

because after all;

I never cared
for the color of deceit
anyhow.....

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Cloud 9
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since 2004-11-05

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Ca

1 posted 2004-11-18 01:52 PM

Hmmmm sounds like someone I know.....

Very nice, put together very well.

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-11-18 02:00 PM

WHOA Girl...would love to have you on my team....way to go

he'd better get his dukes up

a very good write

iwontdrownagain
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since 2003-10-04

Posts 39
Massachusetts

3 posted 2004-11-18 02:11 PM

It's such coincidence that I have had the unfortunate experience with that myself. From one color of deceit hater to another..

"The green of your eyes
That you get from your father
Shows your personality,
Such a young girl with an equally
Young and foolish heart."
~Lynn M

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

4 posted 2004-11-18 02:58 PM

I LOVE reading your rants! ~ and you do it in such a classy and poetic manner!!!

Right on, girlfriend!

Linda

dgvarner
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High Springs, Florida

5 posted 2004-11-18 03:13 PM

Love it! well written!!

hugs, g

"Everybody just wants to get high...sit and watch a perfect world go by..." (T.McGraw)

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

6 posted 2004-11-18 03:14 PM

Good use of line breaks, Donna...

stand-alone lines...
very good!

passing shadows
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displaced

7 posted 2004-11-18 10:30 PM

just like me

JamesMichael
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8 posted 2004-11-18 10:58 PM

Nor I...James

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

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walking the surreal

9 posted 2004-11-19 12:21 PM

well written -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Paul Wilson

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10 posted 2004-11-19 12:30 PM

Donna... Enjoyed your rambling rant.
Who ever that person was didn't know what they were in for, trying too pull the wool over your eyes...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

ethome
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New Brunswick Canada

11 posted 2004-11-19 04:46 AM

Great rebuttal and well written.
Intense & powerful!

Eric

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

12 posted 2004-11-19 05:25 PM

Wow,

Loving this my friend!! Powerful words that hit hard...but then again I am sure this was your intention. Remind me to never cross on your bad side LOL.

Take care,
Amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

JL
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since 2004-04-01

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Texas, USA

13 posted 2004-11-19 07:23 PM

Tell it like it T-I-is...

JL

Susan Caldwell
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Florida

14 posted 2004-11-26 11:19 AM

"You wore your cunning well
     for awhile
until it wore thin
and the fabric of you
        showed through
leaving nothing more
than frayed remnants
of who you
seduced me into
     believing
            that you were"

I could not have said it better!!! Perfect Donna!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

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The World of Poetry

15 posted 2004-11-26 04:01 PM

Woah!

~Alli~

*:.AIM = Alli4000.:*
Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

jellybeans
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Posts 2298

16 posted 2004-11-26 04:40 PM

so many of us here have been affected by that color....you paint it perfectly

Dark Angel
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Posts 10095

17 posted 2004-11-26 04:51 PM

Wow, love the impact of this, very strong and the line breaks? I agree with Kari, you;ve placed them well.

An excellent write Donna

it's a keeper

Mxx

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

Gentle Spirit
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18 posted 2004-11-29 01:53 PM

ya'll make me smile, thanks so much! HUGS

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