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Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

0 posted 2004-11-18 01:16 PM

Where will you go, he asked her.
Anywhere other than here she said,
defiant til the end.
Dragging her bags, she slammed the door
shattering his world.
One week he got a postcard
the next a letter from St. Paul
telling him she was headed to New York.
Then nothing.
His heart breaking he waited.
Then one night he came home
and this message was on his machine

And she said
Daddy can I come home
this world aint all it seems.
It chews you up and spits you out
then swallows all your dreams.
Daddy can I come home?
Am I still your little girl?
And somewhere in that lonely night
God gave him back his world.

He waited and he wondered
will she ever call again.
Every night when he came home
he played that old machine.
He hoped that she would hear the words
that he had left on there, words
meant for her alone.

And he said
Baby won't you come home
and make a brand new start
We may not have a lot of things
but let me heal your heart
Baby wont you come home
you're still my little girl.
Baby please just come home
you are my whole world.

There was a knock on the door...

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

1 posted 2004-11-18 01:18 PM

This one affected me -I'm blinking back tears and I'm not sure why.

Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

2 posted 2004-11-18 01:22 PM

yep ditto.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

3 posted 2004-11-18 02:19 PM

WOW...

the tears won't stop from this one. This reminded me of my sister who left home at age fourteen and my Dad would pray she was safe and come home soon. Unfortunately she never did, I liked your ending much better!

Beautiful touching write,
Take care,
amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2004-11-18 02:44 PM

oh....Loved the entire story and the ending was perfect!

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

5 posted 2004-11-18 03:17 PM

very nice...I like that story...

hugs, g

"Everybody just wants to get high...sit and watch a perfect world go by..." (T.McGraw)

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

6 posted 2004-11-18 04:08 PM

Paula darling sis of my soul, oh how wonderful is this, tear-jerking, and so very real. Love the ending darling heart, it has such an element of hope and happiness. You know you are always an incredible writer, and this is exceptional.

Love this utterly, utterly, it is really one superb piece from you. I so love a poem that has style and substance, and yours always do. Great to see your writing darling one, it always impresses me.

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

7 posted 2004-11-18 04:29 PM

There is a Charles Dickins on that as well.

Nice words

Dave

Mick Hawkes
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since 2000-10-26

Posts 90
Tees-side , England

8 posted 2004-11-18 06:33 PM

excellent..

Never take life too seriously - None of us gets out alive!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2004-11-18 08:26 PM

oh, how touching!

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

10 posted 2004-11-18 08:31 PM

I went down this path a number of years ago.
There is nothing more agonizing than when
a son or daughter leaves home...whether on
good terms or not...and the silence is so
excruciating.

Beautiful penning...lots of memories....
many can relate to this poem.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

11 posted 2004-11-18 10:49 PM

Oh, I know why Nan is blinking back tears...
yes, I surely do...

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2004-11-18 11:23 PM

Touching...James

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