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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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yeah I guess it had to be I must have written it in mind because, y'see, creatively, my thought transcended time and I suckled from the teat erect of wolverine and wine a flail clicking clocks within the swift ticking of a pissed cat's tail licking paws and telling lies blinking too complacently alternating colored eyes by the movement of the sun across a thirsty sky...and I played a claw against the wise sucking on the cold dry sigh of what you used to give... [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-18-2004 09:45 AM).] |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
woah...girl, those edges are sharp! great spill... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Always sharp....  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
yes. No one says it like you Karen.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity It's an ill wind that rains no pain For the brain of sane to reign.  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Karen, this ROCKS lady. Perfect flow and I AM keepin it! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
well done and most honest.... tremendous write as always |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Starve to death attempting to survive on only the souring milk of dimming memories. A pissed cat's tail is snakelike and it's unreliable rythym can get one off-balanced. Enjoyed. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"A pissed cat's tail is snakelike and it's unreliable rythym can get one off-balanced." grin...I don't believe I often quote a reply as a thank you but this is well worth it. Oh Indeed, R.S. Wells, indeed. and I do appreciate all of you for replying, but for some reason, Richard just caught the tone with that. I'll bet he's in a rocking chair in a room fulla pissed-tail cats too. thump-thump-thwick  thanks for reading |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW! You floor me M'lady Serenity. Just amazing. Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good Lord, Karen like a river run dry . . . Oh, I know that cat tail . . . I miss this from you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang, you always amaze me some |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Karen...Damn if I know what you're talking about with your pissed cats tail, but I don't really have to understand it to like it when it comes from you. Oh yah I'm Back for a short visit...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen I wish I could write feeling as well as you do. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
 Karen........WOW, what a write! Makes a lot of sense to me, too. You are a brilliant poet lady. I loved the meter, the beginning and ending rhyming and geeez what can I say...... I love your work! (Missed being here.) hug 'ya.....jo |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Serenity, Thump, thump. Doc |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
and chilling rain shrivels to retain a core of warmth to self remain e |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
sucking on the cold dry sigh of what you used to give what can one say in response~~~ hugs M |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
My youngest son once asked me how to milk a cat. What could I tell him, except very very carefully. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Love this! Awesome write! ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Like it Dave |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Now this one, my friend, I completely understand!! LOL Like a pissed cat's tail is something else!!! )Love ya, girlie  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thanks all for reading(still chuckling at icebox's reply too) but anyhow, I appreciate ya'll giving it a chance, although I rather thought the title sucked (sometimes the puns just type themselves  )Love to all |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
sucking on the cold dry sigh of what you used to give... =================================== *whistling* ... whoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo damn.... those lines hit like bricks.... impact perfection............ signed... the tardy moth "this medium is over taken by keyboard prophets who believe their every word profound." |
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~eternal child~ Junior Member
since 2004-11-23
Posts 31 |
damn this is good you sure you don't bite hard? grin ~ec~ |
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