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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

0 posted 2004-10-21 10:31 PM

So many colors blend their shapes
Drift their changing hood and capes
Sifting through dried contemplates
Or radiant frock and shimmer drapes

As brittle as their offering moans
Some supple fainting deeper tones
Whirled and carried by the wind
Trimmed lost, of frost to oblivion

Recluse of tune these thoughts abound
Some higher mind to solid ground
The most and least to now be found
Upon the winds of change resound

From time to time a gathered few
Remind my heart that I once knew
For certain where this path led to
Yet as they fall the all review

New eyes revise the platitudes
That once a fence now rendezvous
The lively state of flutter by
Again revised in my minds eye

Copyright Kkh 10/21/04

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

1 posted 2004-10-22 01:04 AM

Sets a personality of it's own. I have read this a few times and what I like the most about it is that it could be talking about the woods in fall, it could be talking about a person going through changes in her/his life or the contemplation of one about different events and people in their life. I may be reading way too much into it but that is what struck me. Words have various meanings and sometimes I tend to look at each one before I do the jigsaw. Either way, I very much enjoyed this and the images especially in the first verse were a treat.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

2 posted 2004-10-22 06:54 PM

TD - again you capture me - and I agree with Mark - layers could be read into this piece -lovely -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

3 posted 2004-10-22 08:26 PM

I agree also... You touch a little of everything with this and leave the reader thinking, and rereading to make sure nothing is missed.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

Robert Joseph
Member

since 2000-10-07

Posts 491
South Carolina

4 posted 2004-10-24 12:18 PM

Kathy, your rhyming sway moves the heart with crisp and engaging ease.

Robert Joseph

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