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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2004-11-17 06:53 PM



Storms here do not hide behind concrete or glass
They roll long across prairie to show their heads
As they stalk all who would be in the path
Of quick flashed lightening that strikes forked tongued
With a lash cracked whip of thunder behind

And they laugh

Deep bellowing grumbles as they fly across the sky
On their way to someplace further east
Where if the furies in them build they will drown fields
With winds to make trees cry

“no more”

before the tumbled tear of root from soil
and their own anguished crash
muffled by the roar of such gods as these
sudden summer storms would play at being

yet I stand

in open disregard for them as long as I can ignore
the hair on my neck standing straight and the tingle
that creeps through the air and cracks against the limbs
to discharge suddenly
                                        blinding me

But then

It would seem we are all unable to see at times
And my own lack of vision only leads me to stumble
Along my mind as I watch

And wait
                       For you

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babygirlwlove
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1 posted 2004-11-17 07:51 PM


::how this lightning storm burns..::

you weave words into elements
and poems into spells...

damn, chief....
thought I felt the rain in this

**babyblu**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

SEA
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2 posted 2004-11-17 09:10 PM


"But then

It would seem we are all unable to see at times
And my own lack of vision only leads me to stumble
Along my mind as I watch

And wait
                       For you"


this made me put my hand on my heart....and whisper..." wow "

AWESOME

jwesley
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3 posted 2004-11-17 09:13 PM


Well, I can't top what was said above and won't even try... 'nuff said with EXCELLENT my friend.

jwesley

wranx
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4 posted 2004-11-17 10:42 PM


*laughing*

And just what is it, may I ask, that you could learn from ME?

(except maybe, to get yourself FLAT, when the hair on your head stands up before the thunderhead)

You needn't admit it, but you CAN flat-out write.

hack.....lmao

Sunshine
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5 posted 2004-11-18 01:43 PM



LOL...this, I know...

and Ed?  Well, Sir, all I can say
is that Ed knows what he's talking
about, since you won't listen to
anyone else.


Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2004-11-18 01:49 PM


You take thought and images and turn them into words that we can picture vividly in our minds as they turn into the most beautiful journeys of your poetic abilities....

damn, I love the journey!

LeeJ
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7 posted 2004-11-18 02:03 PM


And they laugh

Deep bellowing grumbles as they fly across the sky


oh boy, that sound is so intense, penetrating right through ya, love that sound, don't you?

Pretty impressive write, very much enjoyed.

Susan Caldwell
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8 posted 2004-12-27 01:39 PM


how did I miss this?

*bump*

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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9 posted 2004-12-27 02:10 PM


smiling, I'd missed it too.

And Ed's advice to Cap is priceless as well:

(except maybe, to get yourself FLAT, when the hair on your head stands up before the thunderhead)


*ahem*

Could be one teensy little problem Ed...

But then, methinks Ron knows just when to run for cover.

And all kidding aside, I also bow to the poet king.

Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 2004-12-27 02:26 PM


LMAO @ Karen...

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Cpat Hair
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11 posted 2004-12-27 02:54 PM


ya'all are far too kind with your words....


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