Open Poetry #34 |
Erudition Of My Soul: The Invisible Angel |
JoshG Member
since 2004-11-16
Posts 127TX, USA |
Out of site... Out of mind... a softly spoken lie. Looking in your eyes I see the perfect compliment to my life. Impossible visions... dancing in my mind. Illusions of you and I together… Distances closing… twenty two hundred… Eleven hundred… no more miles… until you’re mine. Your kiss I have never felt. Your touch evading mine. Your heartbeat is so faint even though it's right next to mine. The small things taken for granted keeping our love in check. A softly spoken sleep with angels saves me from the loneliness creeping down my neck. The picture never painted, the vision not yet perceived. Loving an invisible angel makes me feel complete. (note: this is a series that will be posted in various sections of pip. Mature, dark, prose and open) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very nicely penned Josh! Welcome to Passions, I shall look for your other posts now. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
It's like a constant Hotwire, isn't it. hugs Welcome to PIP Looking forward to reading more of you |
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JoshG Member
since 2004-11-16
Posts 127TX, USA |
Thanks to both of you! I am glad to finally be here. The talent is so diverse, I am excited and looking forward to interacting. Thanks Joshua |
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peaceful_dreamer Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW |
This is really sweet. I love the rhyme pattern and the way you ended it. ~*~peaceful~*~ "I'm just me, trapped in a body." |
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JoshG Member
since 2004-11-16
Posts 127TX, USA |
Thanks again Peace! I appreciate your words! Joshua |
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JoshG Member
since 2004-11-16
Posts 127TX, USA |
I try to continue to improve my work, here is my first edit on this piece... thanks The Invisible Angel (EDITED) Out of sight, Out of mind a softly spoken lie. Day after day I find you as the perfect compliment to my life. Living in two places at once, impossible visions... Illusions of you and I together… Distances closing… twenty two hundred… Eleven hundred… no more miles… until you’re mine. A kiss never felt. A touch evading mine. Our heart beats so faint though they're so close to being one. Small things taken for granted keeping our love in check. Softly spoken sleep with angels saves me, while cold loneliness creeps down my neck. A picture never painted, the vision not yet perceived. Waiting to see why loving this invisible angel makes me feel complete. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome Josh: As you edit, the content remains very fresh...liked your write very much. ThisDiamond |
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