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Open Poetry #34

He's 21

b.costen
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since 2003-11-02

Posts 107
ontario, CAN

0 posted 2004-11-14 03:48 PM

He’s 21
And still thinks his mom
Could die out there
Not make it back home
Still thinks that
Trees grow out of the earth
Not into it
Doesn’t know earth has to hold them down
That the sea is earth
Without its hands tied
That there are unpruned fields
In women that men could still settle in
He still thinks that picking at it
Makes it bigger, that leaving it be
Is a way out instead of a way in
To his own heart
Still thinks that leaving his
Door open at night invites fire
Instead of the four women
Who talk about him on
The elevator who say he’s cautious
Because he always waits for them
With his finger on the button
But the women are cautious too
They only begin on their own floor
And the grates are stuffed with fresh white towels

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-11-14 04:08 PM

Excellent!

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

2 posted 2004-11-14 08:03 PM

I like your view of things - interesting perspective - I enjoyed this

That the sea is earth
Without its hands tied

these two lines especially - kewl

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

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