Open Poetry #34 |
Moonlight Seduction |
Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
i walk down to the seaside heeding the ocean’s call dressed in sweep of crinoline corset strung and taut feet shod in suitable shoes hair upswept in tidy chignon clothed as a lady demure with all my proper on the ocean shimmers in invitation swaying in time to the breeze’s serenade wrapped in the arms of the golden moon draped in the kisses of gilded blue hues whispers . . . temptation . . . calling from the sea . . . “come - feel me” i shed my shoes and feel the wrap of sand swallowing my toes and i walk the light of the moon cascades upon me speaking madness to my mind bidding me shed my lady and stand bare to his eyes and i answer i reach and pull the pins from my hair cascades of chestnut falling and hands – my own? – unlace the strings that hold my sin concealed “yes” the moon cries “come” the sea sighs and crinoline falls in silver pools bare now – glowing beneath moon’s caress skin dewy in ocean’s misted kiss i wade into the liquid seduction that envelops me like famished lips taking in the flavor of a lover “at last” the moon laughs “i taste you” smiles the sea and within their primal embrace i drown in the pagan of me awash in unbridled ecstasy of a woman s.a.t. Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
DANG! this is so sensual, such a call to abandon those lady trappings Makes me want to head for the ocean, right now. A gorgeous write, Susan. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thanks Kacey - nothing like a good hot bath to get the images flowing - wish it were the ocean Hugs - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
can I be moon and watch til just before dawn and then the ocean when breaks the day?? enjoyed this lady in love mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Smiling: You bring the pulse to race in sensations known only to the most sensitive of soul. Excellent TD |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Susan~ Oh my gosh ... I just love it ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
beautful write...i love it!!! ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful writing! Eric |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you my friends - I am pleased you enjoyed - this one is very close to me - Hugs all - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
:::sensual, captivating.....calls to the heart...lovely.. **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
clothed as a lady demure with all my proper on the ocean shimmers in invitation swaying in time to the breeze’s serenade wrapped in the arms of the golden moon draped in the kisses of gilded blue hues Written with words enchanting and from the heart....enjoyed this very much. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So glad to see you share your inspiration in so many delightful ways... |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Ladies - thank you so very much - your kindness warms my heart - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
i walk down to the seaside heeding the ocean’s call dressed in sweep of crinoline corset strung and taut feet shod in suitable shoes hair upswept in tidy chignon clothed as a lady demure with all my proper on the ocean shimmers in invitation swaying in time to the breeze’s serenade wrapped in the arms of the golden moon draped in the kisses of gilded blue hues ------------------------ I enjoyed the assonance and allits in this...A lovely write of vocabulary, word play, color and imagery...a passionate mixing of ocean and emotion...quite the high inspire from thy muse. Well done poetess. when you walked into the room it felt like time was standing still. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
the ocean shimmers in invitation swaying in time to the breeze’s serenade wrapped in the arms of the golden moon draped in the kisses of gilded blue hues whispers . . . temptation . . . calling from the sea . . . “come - feel me” ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Oooooooooooooo, "pretty" nice write Susan! Just beautiful, you~ |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
JM and Bluesy - thank you very much - you gift me a smile - Hugs - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i've been there once or twice too tis a most loverly place you describe dear poet |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!!! So much enjoyed this beautiful write!!! Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Good morning my friends - what a nice gift to awake to - the warmth of your replies - Hugs - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Scintillatiing Susan, I thoroughly enjoyed the sensuosity of this moonlight seduction! Dang, yer good! Have a wonderful day! ~ and night! Linda |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
*smile* yes, that is nice. Well done, Susan! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Probably one of the most sensual writes I have had the pleasure to read. Not only is it written in a soft demure of presentation, but the constuction of it is superb. Your line breaks give appropriate pause, your vocabulary gives it the proper feel, and your descriptive lines and phrases are vivid to the point of bring all the senses into play enveloping the reader. I commend you on an excellent write and one that sets the bounds of your talent. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Linda - Susan - warm hugs - thank you both so much - Mark - you make me blush with pleasure - thank you for your encouraging reply - Hugs to all - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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