Open Poetry #33 |
Youth |
Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Youth If it came back like a kite suddenly remembering gravity, that would be one thing; but what if it ran glacially slow, as a tree might quietly recollect the pattern of its leaves in some bygone springtime; or something sudden, querulous as the sudden memory of an old friend’s phone number? More likely it would be a dewdrop on a cool summer morning, its whole life turning around the joy of its one sunset. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed I guess it depends on what kind of youth you had, huh? Me, there are parts of my youth that can just stay gone!!! A beautiful poem, my friend. Lovely imagery. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
as a tree might quietly recollect the pattern of its leaves I enjoy the pattern your words leave... M |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
as a tree might quietly recollect the pattern of its leaves in some bygone springtime; Lovely write - always Ed. Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
As always I enjoyed the read, it brought a smile to my face. ~Live and Laugh~ Don't look to me for perfection for I will surely let you down. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I'd have to agree that it depends on the childhood. I know I won't want to go back to mine, (I'm young, forgive me ) but then, maybe going forward to adulthood isn't going to be all too great a venture either. Maybe youth isn't what's wanted so much as happiness. I think every dewdrop and every sunset can bring just a little of that back, though. Excellent writing... as always! Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"More likely it would be a dewdrop on a cool summer morning, its whole life turning around the joy of its one sunset." Beautiful phrase! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
There are several beautiful phrases in here that I almost copied, but I see they were the favorites of other, too. Enjoyed your poetry. Gee, youth... would like to replay parts of it again! misc'e |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thoughtful and insightful; making us ponder |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
*smiling*...or perhaps, second childhood... Enjoyed, Sir. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful write Ed....very much enjoyed. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Or what if only part of it came back... all the confusion, hope, hormones and promise... and I was still in this aged carcass? *S* More likely it would be a dewdrop on a cool summer morning, its whole life turning around the joy of its one sunset. This is absolutely beautiful, my friend... |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Yeah rat leader! |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I've always really enjoyed your writing, this is no acception. I absolutely adore you. |
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