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Veiled Naivety
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Veiled Naivety |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Veiled Naivety Wear it, just for me so that me he might slip it away from night eyes beholden only to him holding only to him triumph eyes glazing amazing tweaking time to tilt the whirl where numbers age he’s reversed leaving prior words once voiced said simple thoughts of when, conversed all, tell me, that you have seen as browns and grays meet blues and greens then finger tilting once again Quixote’s mills are otherwise bound the veil is floating, over ground skin is silk in leather wound ~*~ some say danger travels land others say he’s Danger man all I know? He has my veil and naivety is my sure dwell. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
then finger tilting once again Quixote’s mills are otherwise bound the veil is floating, over ground skin is silk in leather wound oh YES lady.... yes... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Veiled Naivety" ~ great title! "tweaking time to tilt the whirl" ~ Terrific use of alliteration ~ and imaginative concept!  EA |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"as browns and grays meet blues and greens then finger tilting once again Quixote’s mills are otherwise bound the veil is floating, over ground skin is silk in leather wound" Dang Deca!... as I always say...when Deca is here summer sizzles!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very powerful write, intense and sensual |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Outstanding poem, Decaflame. Much enjoyed! .....jo |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms deca me thinks he has your veil and you draped it over his shoulder by accident I am sure after you tied his hands with your smile kewl romantica ms |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
While I'm thinking of it, I know someone who looks mighty good in a particular color, but never wore it until I asked her to...and now wears it all the time. Those simple things not the real subject of this poem, but as you'll know, that color wasn't the real subject either. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Deca...you write the winds of passion very well, your name carries with it that feel, that desire...that soft but lingering touch...that stirs the reader. |
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