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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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park, ducks me the ducks none of us with anyplace to go they have greater range not too shy to swim and free from all this remembering they know where bread comes they crowd to it two watchful crows like border collies at the edges together is natural for them how they always are here they have the edge on me there too don’t they all of them agree flap sudden out across the lake and gone even the feathers they left behind won’t help me do that |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sounds like a very lonely day in the park. May your wings fly you wherever you wish to go...  EA |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ Sounds to me that you were at Mile Square Park and soooooooo inspired~ The layering of thought ... expertly displayed~ I couldn't help but think of 'foul play' ... um, make that 'fowl play'~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
many hugs... this was awesome! Your soul will fly with them Ed...how in the world could it not...just a mood your allowing to prevale...but in your great awareness, you will be once again healed...love to you |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 park, ducks and one smile... knowing... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done sir. While the ducks may indeed have some advantages... they don't write, and you do, which gives you one up on them. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed To long for that simple life of ducks....sometimes I do too! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
the golf course where I work has ducks all over the front lake...we feed them at the guard shack...I watch them make their way and often think the same thing |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
together is natural for them how they always are here they have the edge on me there too don’t they Oh, my friend... once again your format adds another wonderful dimension to your words... the reader experiences your drift and lack of direction AND the forlornness... This is absolutely excellent!! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sad isn't it Ed....when the ducks have the upper hand...such simple pleasures and the ability to fly away from it all.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is achingly lovely, Ed. The construction of it played out a certain quality of faltering thought of alone and yet yearning that struck inner chords for me. I enjoyed this very much.  |
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