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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2004-07-16 08:00 AM

Puddles

I am mostly rain
tending to loft
in the clouds
floating where others
are afraid to hang
f
  a
    l
     l
      i
       n
        g
when I shouldn’t be
and you
bend to stir the puddles
in the lingering liquid
wading in with
your petals
unafraid to drink
lightning

"be prepared to bleed" Joni Mitchell

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

1 posted 2004-07-16 08:48 AM

if I close my eyes
the lightning will just be whispers

puddles look good on you ms slick

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-07-16 08:55 AM

wkhen you come ot reckon with your own fears, you find out, lightening can be your friend...and can only hurt you if you let it.

Falling is just another word for a new start...smiles and hugs...wishing you lotsa luck with your new career..

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

3 posted 2004-07-16 08:57 AM

I LOVE rain! ...and what's wrong with drinking lightning anyway?????

*grin*

kayjay
Member Elite

since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

4 posted 2004-07-16 10:28 AM

Now this is a thinker
But surely no clinker.

Nice images. KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

5 posted 2004-07-16 10:36 AM

Sounds like lightening could energize those petals. I love the creativity in your poem and how it is open to interpretation. It's a must have addition to the old bookshelves.
misc'e

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2004-07-16 12:20 PM

OneSlick~
This is as fine an offering as I'll read this day~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

[email protected]

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-07-16 12:32 PM

another good write

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

8 posted 2004-07-16 03:24 PM

Wonderful write!

JL

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

9 posted 2004-07-17 02:27 PM

Wow...!!!

Eric

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

10 posted 2004-07-18 12:44 PM

"and you
bend to stir the puddles
in the lingering liquid
wading in with
your petals
unafraid to drink
lightning."
_____________________

Wow and Damn! LOVE, love, love the style, presentation and imagery in this....and the ending is perfect! Okay, I have a new favourite of yours

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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