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a dead-eye knot |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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black she is the darkest night when the stars all wink subside ebony and mysteries and milky galaxies of tides into the pupil of his eye black and growing capturing here I am a grappling hook I am inside his thigh - dying retribute. brown he is an eye of deer amber and a backlit grave honeydew and "I love you" and the spray of earth engraved like the outer edges of the inside of his cry (am I) denying retribute? I am green and spying pale yellow as the dots of ale rise to top to set the tone foaming me hysterically popping bubbles of alone giggles here inside the why, scrying retribute... * * * You are red a dead-eye knot as I lean to you and I -- you are mixed with hue (as me) and I am just re-flec-ting here inside my inhale sigh prying retribute I lied... begging for the truth. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (10-15-2004 08:34 AM).] |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A true poet speaks! Thank you! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I second that. Just magnificent m'lady. Maree  cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
It amazes me how you do this. That you write so fluid, always y'yeti |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
oh damn...this fingerpaints swirls all over the soul... **feeling you** **babygirL** |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am green and spying pale... ~*~ Yes! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
What's an inhale sigh?....Is that the "pre-sigh" reflex?.....Great terminology and very interesting write here sweets..... |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well now, that darn near brought a tear, and that as you know is very hard to accomplish with me. That ... is a prelude to a book, yes? Awesome dudette. ~ Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I find your work intriguing, layered - fascinating - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
 I think Descartes said it best: "Dude, you freakin rock!!" wait, maybe that wasn't Descartes but Derek, the sweaty kid with the Metallica shirt in my last year of photography well, it still applies |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
BLUE |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Amazing!  |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
....begging for the truth...what an ending! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
black she is the darkest night when the stars all wink subside ebony and mysteries and milky galaxies of tides =============================== you are ALL the colors of poetry KA... and all the shadows and light in between the colors and line... amazing write here...love the last line's theme and repetative reversal. yep...you rock and it rolls me.   |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks all. Although I was aiming for a goal I didn't quite hit to my satisfaction, I do appreciate the time you all took to reply. Let me think on this one awhile and perhaps I can re work it to my own satisfaction. grin...shaking my head at me. Never could satisfy myself.  Thanks again. |
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