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James_A_Fraser
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0 posted 2004-10-07 08:35 PM



Web

It’s a simple anyspider web to me,
I wouldn’t have noticed
if she hadn’t turned me there.
She seems to see such depth in it,
dusted with bits of the world
and now starting to catch dew:

“It holds so much more than I can,”
she says, lost in the net of it.
True it’s laden, beauty about to form,
and already the smallest droplets
strive to turn its utilitarian whorl
to the sheerest diamond lace.

I know what it will be then,
each fleck a shining crystal ball
to tell me a dewdrop’s fortune,
show me tiny worlds, transparent,
uncountable worlds, displayed like time
itself suspended on a gossamer strand.

And if I stand just so, while those beads
gather from this moistening air,
I’ll see her at the center of each.


© Copyright 2004 James A. Fraser - All Rights Reserved
miscellanea
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1 posted 2004-10-07 08:42 PM


Simply gorgeous imagery and poetry, James.  It makes me want to become a web watcher, as well!
        
I know what it will be then,
each fleck a shining crystal ball
to tell me a dewdrop’s fortune,
show me tiny worlds, transparent,
uncountable worlds, displayed like time
itself suspended on a gossamer strand.


I'd like to be able to illustrate this and write this in calligraphy.  Absolute perfection!
       miscellanea

Martie
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2 posted 2004-10-07 11:02 PM


Jamie...so beautiful and touching to read this.  Simple things can bring such joy!  
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3 posted 2004-10-08 10:28 AM


It’s a simple anyspider web to me,
I wouldn’t have noticed
if she hadn’t turned me there.

But you DID notice... and wrote this gem of words that simply glistens... This verse in particular:

I know what it will be then,
each fleck a shining crystal ball
to tell me a dewdrop’s fortune,
show me tiny worlds, transparent,
uncountable worlds, displayed like time
itself suspended on a gossamer strand.

is so incredibly lovely. *S* Beautiful work!

LeeJ
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4 posted 2004-10-08 10:32 AM


in this I see the miracle of morning dew sparkling the web, making it look as if, it were God's own thoughts...

Your writing is outstanding

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2004-10-08 10:40 AM


Jaime~
*sigh*
This morning, in particular, I read you and am suspended in your thoughts~
Mysteriously lovely is this word-webbing~
I don't want to leave your word space~
So I will take this one with me~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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