Open Poetry #33 |
Color Comes Sometimes in The Fall |
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Here, the river bends And I reach, weeping For something Someone to hang on to Erosion leading to smaller places Leaving tiny traces Of what use to be And she mocks me Knowing the channel remains empty Save for my battered and bruised soul Harsh wind and rain taking its toll She punishes me I push harder Hoping for salvation from her wicked waves Her protruding rocks and blinding heat She offers no retreat And I remember you The coolness of your hand on my back Leading me from the darkness of fear Shadow of comfort in your breath I long to breathe now Away from swollen sea Away from the ugly of me I long for the color of that fall. ______________________________________________ *and I met you in the winter but you have done nothing but add color to my life..thank you for that my friend.* "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" ~Sarah McLachlan~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Susan, I'm rather speechless... this is so very moving and introspective... gawd, I've missed your words gal... glad to see them and your smile again! The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
This is all really really very good!!!!!!!!! Thank you for giving my afternoon a lift. *smile* |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Enjoyed the motion and emotion of this- Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Beautiful writing, not as beautiful as your rants but still..grin |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wow!! Excellent write Susan!! Hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
There is only that ugliness within us which we wonder might be there....and that which we know but refuse to see. Once perceived clearly, it becomes something else or ceases to exist at all. I suspect that by the act of writing this poem you have freed yourself, at least in part. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
precious |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Transcendant. Loved it! "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
oh Susan, what an incredible write pure tender you have focused on and the incredible experiences offered to us if we allow...life in all it's classical sound. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"I long for the color of that fall." Maybe it's time for a drive, look at the leaves, listen to some tunes... Mornin' Myrtle!! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
loved every word and then He created the horse... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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