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When the stars gushed
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When the stars gushed |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Under a purple sky Dancers danced their backs arched and hearts swaying Stomping willing feet Roaring your rythem Stars gushed around you shining heated light Burning your strong and weary back ~and leeches crept suckling your baby skin Blood flowed yours. but pain always was a normalacy for you wasn't it? ~you never did get to be a baby Our hands Our feet stained red with your blood, with our love for you but kisses always abound in a circle of friends A ribbon of light splits the skies the rain pours, and of the salt of your sweat melts the enemies of your skin ~and~ Your nose finally cracked I thank God Your nose finally Cracked *watching someone live through a drug addiction is tough - but it is so awesome to see them actually get free from it - [This message has been edited by Copperbell (10-03-2004 11:08 PM).] |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Wow! There are some strong cosmic images in there, Copperbell. Almost like rave footage rewound. coyote  |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
one word says it all...powerful One cannot see what lies within if one does not see the obvious |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Wow. Ditto...Powerful. Pleasantly haunting tribute those engaged in such a struggle...really for survival. It was touching and I loved it. You really were right on target with this one. flawless! Kevin |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
agreed, it is awesome to watch someone come out from under that spell |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Thank you everyone - I am so happy for my friend - it's been a looong time coming |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is incredibly powerful. Yes, those are victories that deserve to be celebrated! Love, Margherita |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sounds as abeautiful as a metamorphasis from addiction into freedom |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Marguerita, the addiction has a mighty power to drag a person down, its an incredible amount of power to pull a person out of it Inked- he can think again - and spend his energy on good things |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hello Copperbell. I believe this is the first of your poems I have read. I was surprised by the imagery you weaved. Amazing! And yet that word does not really suffice. This is an incredible piece. Thank-you for gifting it to the reader. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Thank you so much... |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Wonderful read,glad they came through. Hugs |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Me too - the best thing is they have an opportunity to speak to kids in schools about it |
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