Cursed (reworked and reposted)

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Open Poetry #33

Cursed (reworked and reposted)

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2004-10-02 01:40 AM

Cursed

this is my decree
for every tear
you made me cry
you shall now cry three
till there is land no more
your world a raging sea

for every puncture
torn in my heart
how you have made it
yes, played your part
finely tuned every cut
pencil dots drawn
in deception’s art

you will feel pain
with no appeal
pretended in games
its truth you concealed
your stone heart
will melt to a glass one
frail and so real

listen well to my verse
your lies now betray you
it is your own curse
tears, pain, and emptiness
from this day on
from me to you
shall be reversed

“until you do right by me…everything you do is doomed to failure”
Alice Walker…The Color Purple

Goldenrose
Member Elite

since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

1 posted 2004-10-02 08:11 AM

This is a hurting king of poem,well written, but the hurt is tangible...take care..

Goldenrose.

The supreme happiness in life is the conviction that we are loved. Victor Hugo.

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

2 posted 2004-10-02 10:46 AM

tears
multiply
their moist
salt warmth
enough
and
never enough

add broken
pieces of heart
and dream
slurry in the
lies
deceptions

soon like
the soft gray
slush
concrete is
they will set
in the shape
pain has pushed
them to

and turn
to
stone

Your poems never fail to move me, though I usually bottle up the words that come then. These, I didn't.

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passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-10-02 11:20 AM

you always get better and better, every day

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

4 posted 2004-10-04 04:39 PM

for every puncture
torn in my heart
how you have made it
yes, played your part
finely tuned every cut
pencil dots drawn
in deception’s art

But those who deserve it most always seem to escape the curse. *S* This is excellent... as are the responses it has inspired. *S*

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