A Sestina for Tish (at least i hope this is a sestina)

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Open Poetry #33

A Sestina for Tish (at least i hope this is a sestina)

Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

0 posted 2004-09-29 11:16 PM

Sweet sixteen and oh so humble
beauty, charm, an irridesent soul
dealt blows to insecurity each day
seemingly unscathed, but anger fills her eyes
good friends come to betray
leaving her only with tears

lakes of pain through tears
how does this happen to the humble?
turn your face away from those who betray
never let them ruin your tender soul
or darken your eyes
live to love another day

justice they will recieve for actions one day
paying for each drop of tears
that fell from your tired eyes
through this will you stay humble
and will a light shine from your soul
to deter all those who come to betray?

remember that not everyone will betray
live life to the fullest each day
stay your tender soul
find allies to keep away the tears
stay humble
and keep those angelic eyes

keep your pure eyes
and weather those who betray
for your aura is humble
and will be rewarded one day
those spiteful tears
will be wiped from your soul

with that irridesent soul
and magnificant eyes
you will find some one to dry your tears
one who will not betray
but until that day
please saty humble

just know that one whom a voice can't be placed won't betray
and love you as you are from day to day
just because you had been so human and humble

(ok so this really is not my element but let me know what you thought of my first journey into the open poetry realm.)

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2004-09-30 01:09 PM

Well, I don't know much about the sestina format, hopefully this follows the Rx.
But I do like the message, and want to complement you for giving Tish such a tender compassionate write.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989