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Open Poetry #33

Green Fields

Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2004-09-24 11:35 PM

Yea I see you in the greenfield
the one with the true blue eyes
the one with the happy smile of
pure playfulness

Flowers swaying through the wind
don't know where to begin. Is this
real or just a lost glimer of hope?

I think it is hopefully I can
steal your heart from you as you
put the twinkle in my eyes once again

Everything comes together so fresh
the soft touch of your hands the
caress of your warm fingers.

THe air is sureal I can barely
feel,euphoric sence takes over me
as all I can do is breathe

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

1 posted 2004-09-25 06:43 AM

Hi Julie. Loved this. This is a great poem you have here. Just need to fix the spelling mistake on the word, "sense." But that is but a small matter when looked at the package as a whole...and as a whole I give this poem 2 thumbs up! It is going back to the top. It shouldn't be at the bottom of the page already.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

2 posted 2004-09-25 06:54 AM

Smiling at EV2 as I'm getting in some good reading thanks to his sending poems to the top. Enjoyed this.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-09-25 09:42 AM

good write
good feeling

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