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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Brace You say it’s in my hands our survival of our emotions you say we’d last forever if I’d only let us but your hand and mine are entwined in this time that we called perfection haven’t we learned our lesson? when all this is over and the dusty tears have settled I’ll always be looking for you in the shadows of my dreaming in every word and its meaning you’re the sunlight on my face now against the wind I brace You say it’s up to me to end this end it all on a silent, sad note neat and cold, the words you wrote beaten and sold and I’m up for sale I’ve been replaced, set sail but now that this is over and emotionless goodbyes exchanged between cold eyes that once burned with lightning that once blessed us, brightening our beautifully full faces but now against the storm this sad face braces There are endless waves of sound waves of grief drowning me now reasons we had to part reasons curse my art and I wonder where you are and I wonder how far you can go without me on your mind without me in the shivering night without me when you fall and you will fall but so will we all now the nightmares of an old flame distant eyes, and I don’t feel the same I hope you’re sleeping peacefully you deserve so much more than me I thought I was the right thing for you I knew somehow you were right for me now I’m just quitting the race fell down on my face now this all seems such a waste daydreams I court and chase but I’ll keep you inside me for your memory frees me from all the love I brace "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey [This message has been edited by soul drifter (09-25-2004 04:21 PM).] |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Ouch. This is so sad, the sense of loss and regret yet perhaps some confusion- my only suggestions is this line "but so will us all" I wonder if "we" would read easier. Well poured out emotion- Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hey soul drifter. This is one big ouch! I remember this feeling. The endless circle of questions without answers when my ex and I were divorced. Through poetry I found release. Mayhap this megium can bring thee too a small measure of comfort...remember though eventually we all move on...and this hurt is but a passing thing. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 I understand |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Thanks all for the comments, and thanks Susan, I might reword that indeed... it does flow better to my mind. And hey, I'm okay; I wrote this over a year ago, when someone I had an unrequited love for decided to not be around anymore. That's how the cookie doth crumble at times... "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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