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Autumn Rides The Foehn
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Autumn Rides The Foehn |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Autumn Rides The Foehn This is the day pine needles fall from off the wailing trees and scrolls of eucalyptus bark roll backward up the street. That’s how autumn comes here in this inverted paradise, where rain falls up from the ground like Eden and the turn into the cooling season rides a hot wind out of the mountains. Spiders hate this day, their webs blown inside-out and braided with leaves, and the birds walk east into the wind, feathers blown flat, or turn from the blast, fly west like rockets. This is my time and I lean into it full on. There’s freedom in the day-long gusts that fill the eyes with beach grit and the sight of waves rearing like stallions under a blue copper sky, manes sprayed white over the dark troughs between. Later, the night black, silent testimony of bruised leaves and the spurl of insects blown a hundred miles, singing still. Yes, this is my time. "Foehn: A warm dry wind on the lee side of a mountain range, whose temperature is increased as the wind descends down the slope. Examples include the Chinook wind and the Santa Ana wind." |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Sounds like that life. Dave |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
That’s how autumn comes here in this inverted paradise, where rain falls up from the ground like Eden and the turn into the cooling season rides a hot wind out of the mountains. ~*~ Welcome, Santa Ana... |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Ratleader, Thanks for the terminology. There isn't a time that I read your poetry when I don't learn something. I found your first verse to be especially visual: inverted paradise, webs blown inside out and braided with leaves, eucalyptus bark scrolled rolling backward on the street. You used contrast very well, my friend. Now, I see why you chose your name as you did! miscellanea |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
today, is a wonderful day here in Pennsylvania, and you have well described a painted picture truely felt...wonderful scribe |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed This is just the way the Santa Ana winds make me feel....inside out! IWIHWT !! What a wonderful, glorious day!  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ed, this is absolutely marvelous, autumn is my fav season. Thanks for letting me feel your autumn. it's a  Maree Well I see you doing, What I try to do for me, With the words from a poet, And a voice from a choir, And a melody, nothing else matters. ~Stevie Nicks |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
So many gushing words of praise come to mind as I read this... but what it really deserves can be said more simply: This is one of the finest poems I've ever read... anywhere. |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
I loved this one too. The way you described everything and the flow that this has - I thoroughly enjoyed this. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ I have been there and felt the Santa Ana's blow ... never would I have been able to write it this way~ This is quite lovely, my friend~ Quite lovely indeed~ I will share it with my sister who lives out your way~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Ed, this is great stuff . . . "where rain falls up from the ground like Eden and the turn into the cooling season rides a hot wind out of the mountains." Rf |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Eddy darling man truly this is exquisite. I wish so much I had even half your ability darling one, but its no use I never will. You know I’m going to say this is utterly perfect don’t you? Of course I am because it is. The imagery in this is so clear, so beautifully portrayed, I really love it. Absolutely beautiful writing darling man, your gift is to twist words into patterns of wonder and I’m utterly bespelled by the way you craft them so well as always Mushy    Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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