Open Poetry #33 |
The kiss of the Arrow |
Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Bow grasped in hand Sleek, smooth, well fitting String taut and strong Arrow fletched and nocked Pulled back full draw Kissing cheek in greeting Anchored by fingers waiting . . . Anticipating --Breath stilled -- Steady Ready Release Shaft soars through air True, swift, seeking Trailing whispers of its path Before the target meeting Pierced Bleeding Your heart shall weep From the wounds of its making Tears shed in tender bliss A soul just now awakening Given life by quivering death Of an Arrow loosed as this s.a.t. a little word of explaination - arrow represents strong emotion, in this case, love, that the archer sends to the target, or from one heart to another.When an arrow strikes a target, it quivers, gifting its last bit of energy and strength to the target before it settles to a stop. Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Dunno exactly why, but this reminds me of some of Shakespeare's sonnets, specifically his 153rd, wherein Cupid's brand "got new fire" from "my mistress' eyes"; and how love heals the soul, shot straight through the heart. Gah, I'm babbling, nevermind. I just wanted to say, I loved this poem.. it's beautiful and it did indeed touch me. Thanks. "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you for the kindness of you reply and I am very pleased that you enjoyed this. Archery is a most beautiful sport, it is one that allows the archer to achieve a zen like state. For me, the bow in hand, nocking the arrow, the sound of its flight, the sight of its path - it is beautiful. susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
To hear the winds of fatal soar from fletch and feathered shaft. A kiss when drawn awaits the flight before the finished draught. The whisper's edge rings silent, the bow now still in wait. The gleaming blade once violent lies quiet till known their fate. Thanx Susan for your thoughts of the bow and arrow....I have always enjoyed archery...a lot of fun until you start putting them too close together and break the nocks off.... No, I don't have a closet of tools...(of your kind)... Loved the poem and the metaphorical use of the arrow and instrument in symbolizing love....very appropriate... Have any experience with Black Widow spiders? Or Praying Mantis...??? |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thanks Barry - I've sent you a note. Love the response. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
never could grasp archery....was afraid I'd end up killing someone for sure, one needs strong arms and a steady pose |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I could tell you are an archer! I tried my hand at it when I was fifteen and my arrow just went "Thud" down at my feet! This was a pleasure to read. You are such a skilled writer! Enjoyed. miscellanea |
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Daniel Storm Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 91New York |
Susan, good write! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
P.S. just don't let anyone stand down range! Mis'c - thanks so much for the compliment. Daniel - thank you Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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ShiningWindHaze Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 138California, United States |
I didn't even need an explanation. It explained itself. You express yourself in creative ways. Your work is always different. - Haze |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you Haze. Sometimes I speak of things in metaphors that are foreign to those unfamiliar with the art, such as archery. I am pleased that the thought transcended the words. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely...I like the way you put it "the kiss of the arrow"...james |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
I got a mangaflex crossbow, 200lb thrust laser sight, bionic stabalizer arm to keep the pattern small, hollow shaft surgical steal bolts with razor tips and fiber optic radio sensor flights.. AND I hired some guy named bill tell to do the shooting.......... wanna play a game of shafts? enjoyed your art ms |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
James - thank you Dark - wow, sounds dangerous. I enjoy the long bow, personally - yesterday I split the wand. Sure you want to play? Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Susan, I understood this ~ and enjoyed reading of the arrow's kiss! May all the slings and arrows in your life be of outrageous GOOD fortune! Linda |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
exception imagry...really enjoyed reading this... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
VERY well done Susan, enjoyed as I always do your work. Hugs. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thanks my friends - I do appreciate you - Hugs Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Reads to me like your aim is dead on! Outstanding metaphor, Susan. |
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