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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2004-09-09 10:56 PM

a leaf
on the brook;

my shadow slid off;

i drove for miles

but can't remember
why i'm here;

something is lost

but i don't know
what it is,

pinch me

color me real,

nothing sticks,

floating by........

a leaf on the brook

cloud carosels
carry crazy blonde thoughts;

god is blowing on the sky

echoing eachoter,
the clowns go round and round and round;

i'm searching for body parts
tossed along the sunday drive

i have no home;

there is no connection;

just a leaf on the brook.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2004-09-10 12:44 PM

you can always hang out with us in the blue pages, it's a warm comfort zone home, with the rest of us floating leaves.
BTW, you have a really great smile.

namaste, dear poet friend

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-09-10 02:16 AM

I understand this feeling so well...so well

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2004-09-10 03:47 PM

Damn, I have felt like this too Michele -all torn up and part of nothing . . .

you have described it amazingly . . .

Kazm
Member

since 2003-11-13

Posts 99

4 posted 2004-09-10 04:17 PM

Maybe I'm too forward in saying so, but I think I would swim in that brook. Your poem is beautiful. So is the thought behind it.

Kaz

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

5 posted 2004-09-10 07:50 PM

thanks for the poetry in your feedback kacy

dixie, thanks for understanding

sue, i'm glad someone could relates

kaz, thanks, to float like that leaf on the brook - serene isn't it?

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2004-09-10 09:09 PM

Always do I find the peace within your works...
Loved this title...loved the float.
TD

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

7 posted 2004-09-10 10:06 PM

To echo TD, I always find peace in them too.  When I read you work, I always read it
aloud, savoring the pauses and pace.
    miscellanea

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2004-09-11 01:17 PM

color me real,

nothing sticks,

floating by........

Isn't that just like a leaf!!
Wonderful, wonderful, blondielocks~

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

9 posted 2004-09-11 07:27 PM

Really does convey very well the sense of alienation .... when caught up in the unimportant

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

10 posted 2004-09-11 09:34 PM

thanks as always

for making me smile

PassionandFun
Member

since 2003-07-30

Posts 60

11 posted 2004-09-13 10:34 AM

Nice job!

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