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Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2004-09-05 09:04 PM

{From my Journals of Endless Winter}

~~*~~
{I ask wind for words}

but the trees are still
awaiting rain
green stretches from horizon to horizon
wrapping everything into moments
when I was young with you

I have remembered you fondly
the song  -- the music
the way our feet left prints
on the beach and our
shadows ran behind us

how in winter     stands the lonely tree
each limb more silent then the next
with promises of rebirth  and growth

and when my heart is full of pain
the rain will tap the glass and reflection
and I will await such a reply:

that love stood a moment in your eyes
that words lay upon your tongue
their sound will sleep with each dream

here your heart began the echo
and offering

reminding me the fragrance of morning
in open flowers

cradles    the air

between two sleeps
~~**~~

I don’t want the world to see me
cause I don’t think that they’d understand
When everything’s made to be broken I just want you to know who I am

Midnitesun

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Gaia

1 posted 2004-09-05 09:13 PM

A truly beautiful write, Lady Greeneyes.
Just a dream for so many, to have had such a love.

Larry C

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since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

2 posted 2004-09-05 09:19 PM

Well Lauren,
I'm happy you decided to share. I love this...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

3 posted 2004-09-05 09:50 PM

Once again I am at a loss for words..
Excellent pretty lady~

~ Summer can't be over...
I still have the sand in my shoes. ~

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

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In Your Poetic Mind

4 posted 2004-09-05 11:53 PM

Kacy~ Larry~ Nancy~

I appreciate your words so much, thank you for taking time to peek in and read....hugssss to all...

I don’t want the world to see me
cause I don’t think that they’d understand
When everything’s made to be broken I just want you to know who I am

passing shadows
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displaced

5 posted 2004-09-06 01:00 AM

what a fine series

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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USA

6 posted 2004-09-06 01:18 AM

Lauren, I am awestruck with the loveliness and flow of this one. Outstanding!

....jo

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

7 posted 2004-09-06 08:54 AM

You know how much I enjoy your writing,
Lauren...and this is just another example why.

shakespeare
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since 2004-09-05

Posts 5

8 posted 2004-09-06 09:17 AM

So fantastic &sweet words.It touches the bottom of my heart.
I'm really enjoying it so much.
Ur style fascinated me Greeneyes.
continue writing such a wonderful poems.
Best wishes.

ShiningWindHaze
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since 2004-09-06

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California, United States

9 posted 2004-09-06 09:31 AM

Nice write ^_^

Ratleader

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Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

10 posted 2004-09-06 09:57 AM

Beauty from start to finish....and these lines:

"that love stood a moment in your eyes
that words lay upon your tongue
their sound will sleep with each dream"

....make me wish I could see the world through your eyes for even a day.

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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

11 posted 2004-09-06 01:35 PM

that love stood a moment in your eyes
that words lay upon your tongue
their sound will sleep with each dream

Made me weep for what no longer is.
Lauren dear, your heart is a soulful one,
and your words touch me deeply.

Hugs, you~

Kristabell
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since 2003-11-29

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Portland, OR

12 posted 2004-09-06 08:34 PM

I love the Goo Goo Dolls. Very nicely written.

ctowen
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Green Mountains of VT

13 posted 2004-09-08 02:36 PM

... between two sleeps ....

dreamy, as are your words.

Great write and heart.

Gentle Spirit
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14 posted 2004-09-08 03:16 PM

I know I sound like a broken record L~ but gawd I love reading you, your soul is so beautiful.

Nightshade

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just out of reach

15 posted 2004-09-08 03:55 PM

Words that only you, Lauren, could have written. Awesome. Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."

— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet

soul drifter
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since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

16 posted 2004-09-08 04:14 PM

Very beautiful, gave me a warm feeling while reading it. I'll remember this one, as well as your talents.

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

Contabo
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17 posted 2004-09-08 08:37 PM

Oh my.....oh my goodness

Janet Marie
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18 posted 2004-10-09 10:50 AM

Its lovely Lauren Day!!

Susan
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walking the surreal

19 posted 2004-10-09 10:58 AM

My, my, my - stirring -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Dark Angel
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20 posted 2004-10-09 07:37 PM

this is really very beautiful Lauren.

Enjoyed.

Maree

cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

~ani difranco~

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

21 posted 2004-10-09 07:52 PM

quote:
here your heart began the echo
and offering

Deeply charming lines!

And I love the title too.

Love, Margherita

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

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In the winds of Cherokee song

22 posted 2004-10-10 01:25 PM

and when my heart is full of pain
the rain will tap the glass and reflection
and I will await such a reply:

that love stood a moment in your eyes
that words lay upon your tongue
their sound will sleep with each dream

here your heart began the echo
and offering

*******************

To know this love is a blessing, to understand and appreciate it's worth is purity of soul between two. Awesome write as always.

aujussy wolf

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Posts 1215
Michigan

23 posted 2004-10-10 01:50 PM

how in winter stands the lonely tree
each limb more silent then the next

...
.......

...greeneyes
love your winter writes
always have always will
lol sad and beautiful
hugs , wolfy

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

24 posted 2004-10-11 08:34 AM

can imagine you
talking on the phone
with your back to the trees
wishing they would move around
and be lovely in front of you

you will move the room soon
with your love thoughts
enjoyed you here ms

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

25 posted 2004-10-11 10:44 AM

GreenEyes~

You stirred a memory I thought forgotten~

'I have remembered you fondly'

Thank you for the beauty of your words~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Skyfire

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Riding

26 posted 2004-10-11 02:20 PM

This I love. Very much so

and then He created the horse...

Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

27 posted 2004-10-11 10:20 PM

Thank you for such heartfelt replies....love and hugsssss

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

28 posted 2004-10-12 09:00 AM

This is stunning and it brought me back
Lauren, to places I dont like to visit.
But it left me with a smile.
You are an amazing poetess, m'friend.

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