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DarkDreamer
Junior Member

since 2004-09-04

Posts 19
nowhere,special

0 posted 2004-09-04 09:19 PM

I wrote a poem, just now. it's soo good. I hope ya'll enjoy it...

As the light passes across the floorboard,
projected by the other cars
I hold my book down to catch a few extra words.

I watch as a few blasts of light pass over my image in the window.
I see myself and just me.
I hear my own heartbeat and steady breathing
harmonizing and singing together with the roar of the motor.
I watch my own eyes blend with the moon, as the sky shifts and toils restlessly.
I feel so tired, yet I feel so free;

Yet I am not flying and I am not running.
I feel no wind through my hair,
but I feel the warmth,
As the light passes.

I feel so free while I see the real me.
There's no tension and no stress in this car.
There's only me, the driver and the road and the night.

As the time goes by I feel numb.
I feel the vibration of Led Zeppelin playing in the cd player.
I feel the Force of the music in my ears
But most of all I watch the moon and I absorb her melancholy.
I compare my self to the one called Artemis.
Life is the road in front of me
and as we travel, I realize what I have and what I've lost.

And I live as the light passes.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-09-04 09:32 PM

Welcome, Darkdreamer, to Passions in Poetry. I enjoyed your first poem. I hope to see many from you. If you have any questions, please, contact a moderator or administrator...we'll be glad to be of assistance.

Write on!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close...

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2004-09-04 09:41 PM

Welcome to Passions.
Well done first post.
Hope you will add what you have found, and delight in it.
ThisDiamond

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

3 posted 2004-09-05 01:11 AM

Welcome to PIP, DarkDreamer. This first poem of yours .... nice .... and it took me back to a similar memory years ago and a feeling much like you described. Enjoyed.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

4 posted 2004-09-05 04:20 PM

Welcome to Passions

we are glad you're here!

Please check your email for a special greeting

Kindly~

Greeneyes~

I don’t want the world to see me
cause I don’t think that they’d understand
When everything’s made to be broken I just want you to know who I am

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2004-09-05 06:30 PM

I enjoyed this very much, and look forward to more from your pen. Welcome to Passions!

electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

6 posted 2004-09-05 06:36 PM

wow, i really liked this.
it reminded me of myself.
good job, hope you keep
writing.

-kelly

Jes
Member

since 2003-10-21

Posts 422
Denmark

7 posted 2004-09-06 11:19 AM

Hi Darkdreamer

Welcome - next time you have ride like that can i please have the seat next to ya that peace you felt there is so lovely and so restfull i remember those days were i was a kid and just sat with my head up against the window in the car and felt the motor as you describe.

Well done.

Smiles

Jes / Dreamer

Life is for me to be - but always with a smile !

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