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Cpat Hair

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0 posted 2004-08-25 09:25 AM

Lightning split itself into shards
As it reflected off the rippled skin
Dark satin of lake disturbed this night
By the gusts of wind and heavy air
That sighed
Like I remembered you did
At the touch of good bye

That heavy exhale of breath followed
By an intake
Of lower bitten lip

And I smelled the rain
Long before it came to fall in pregnant drops

I wanted the words to come
Just as I had wanted them then
   Or the rain to be warm that I might stand out
Surrounded by the fury of it all
And be cleansed

But the rain was chill
     And the words unspoken still

Perhaps another lifetime dear
       And I’ll find the eloquence of tongue
To explain it all
                            The empty ache denied
The loss
                         The fear

For now…
                I’ll smell the thunder
And taste the feel

Of August passing storms
  And wonder
                    Was it ever real

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

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1 posted 2004-08-25 09:27 AM

damn.....this is good Ron! I enjoy your work immensely, and learn so very much about poetry and life through your words.
Thank you for that.

Sunshine

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2 posted 2004-08-25 09:30 AM

And I smelled the rain
Long before it came to fall in pregnant drops

I wanted the words to come
Just as I had wanted them then

~*~

...when only silence filled the void
both in space and in my soul.

jellybeans
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3 posted 2004-08-25 09:30 AM

exactly what GS said...reading your poetry is to enjoy, but also to learn.......
wonderfulwonderful write

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

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4 posted 2004-08-25 09:34 AM

it certainly was real my friend, and with you, you will take the positive from it, and savor the rest of your life in liquid water from the reality of dreams come true.

Wonderfully written, this one's a keeper!

icebox
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in the shadows

5 posted 2004-08-25 09:34 AM

Lightning truly is a thing of wonder.

Well done!

muted

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6 posted 2004-08-25 09:39 AM

OMG
its real
its real
*sigh*
almost too much so

damn
damn
double damn
this IS ....beyond words

vandana

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7 posted 2004-08-25 09:42 AM

enjoyed

SEA

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with you

8 posted 2004-08-25 09:53 AM

this touches deep in me.....

"I wanted the words to come
Just as I had wanted them then
   Or the rain to be warm that I might stand out
Surrounded by the fury of it all
And be cleansed

But the rain was chill
     And the words unspoken still

Perhaps another lifetime dear
       And I’ll find the eloquence of tongue
To explain it all
                            The empty ache denied
The loss
                         The fear"

yes... I know this much too well....

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

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9 posted 2004-08-25 10:45 AM

Wow - I can feel the electricity in the air, the coming storm, the feel of emotion -- absolutely love this.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Martie

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10 posted 2004-08-25 11:00 AM

Ron

You've described the excitment of a storm and so much more....really well done!

Midnitesun

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Gaia

11 posted 2004-08-25 11:09 AM

think I just bit my lip
lightning storms excite
as does this write

Copperbell
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12 posted 2004-08-25 12:34 PM

wanted the words to come
Just as I had wanted them then
Or the rain to be warm that I might stand out
Surrounded by the fury of it all
And be cleansed

But the rain was chill
And the words unspoken still

so sad...to often the rain is chill, and words unspoken - sometimes it takes everything within to leave them unspoken

passing shadows
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displaced

13 posted 2004-08-25 12:42 PM

sigh

you're good

wandering glider
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aloft

14 posted 2004-08-25 02:53 PM

Real,
and so ephemeral,
no matter the measure

-glider-

Midnitesun

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Gaia

15 posted 2004-08-25 06:22 PM

methinks
you already know
more 'bout lightning
than is safe

but who cares about safety, anyway?

LOL (Benjamin didn't)

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

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16 posted 2004-08-26 08:35 AM

Oh Ron, WOW!...just wow.

I LOVE IT!

and it's mine

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

RMW
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17 posted 2004-08-26 10:15 AM

There is something about heavy weather in August that fascinates. I enjoyed this very much. Nicely done, Ron. Bob

miscellanea
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OH

18 posted 2004-08-26 10:31 AM

"Lightning split itself into shards"
That line's a real killer!  I remember being in a little cottage very close to my house during a storm.  My mother was in the adjacent farmhouse about 20 feet away.  We had just unplugged the T.V. about ten seconds before the lightening knocked the T.V. outlet off the wall, needless to say I jumped right out of my shoes!  The most peculiar thing happened when we compared notes with my mother in the adjacent house.  It was if the lightning bolt had split into two parts, sound and light. I believe it was the house I was in that got all the sound, whereas the room she was present incurred the light.   As you can see, you struck a chord with me on the first line!  Enjoy your poetry a lot.
               miscellanea

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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19 posted 2004-08-27 03:49 PM

Yes... it was... And this is... superb!!! I don't understand your excellence... but I certainly appreciate it! *S*

babygirlwlove
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20 posted 2004-10-20 08:57 AM

"I wanted the words to come
Just as I had wanted them then
Or the rain to be warm that I might stand out
Surrounded by the fury of it all
And be cleansed"

now this is prayer...and when poetry becomes prayer...you've taken the art form to a new level...

niiice..
**baby blue**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

littlewing
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21 posted 2004-10-20 09:21 AM

But the rain was chill
     And the words unspoken still

Perhaps another lifetime dear
       And I’ll find the eloquence of tongue
To explain it all
                            The empty ache denied
The loss
                         The fear

For now…
                I’ll smell the thunder
And taste the feel

Oh, I know this feel . . .
I have so much to learn about writing.

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

22 posted 2004-10-20 02:39 PM

sigh......seems that autumn holds much...
powerful write......have never read a single thing by you that is not exceptional *s*

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