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Anticipating Autumn
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Anticipating Autumn A hawk called in fly by across the blue and suddenly the sun closed down with a dog barking the neighborhood gate sounding alarm too soon not too late All my skin was wind wise and in the place of feathers and questions I draped my sheer portent determined to close only clouds and ease into something that I don’t know yet But I feel it coming like a slow train beating out a rhythm calling to my lack of rain with fresh fill of some song it is bursting and I can almost sing along Then like some sweet minute never meant to end it’s gone and I am all alone again |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Then like some sweet minute never meant to end it’s gone and I am all alone again Martie... despite how you might feel alone.. you are never alone... |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Only you could make me anticipate something more... as you well know. You never seem alone, you know, when you wrap your words so well around you. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"But I feel it coming like a slow train beating out a rhythm calling to my lack of rain with fresh fill of some song it is bursting and I can almost sing along" Autumn is my favorite season, just wish it wasn't followed by winter...  Enjoyed much Martie. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - you say and I stand in awe -you give me eyes that see things I never imagined - this is great - paul |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"But I feel it coming like a slow train beating out a rhythm calling to my lack of rain with fresh fill of some song it is bursting and I can almost sing along Then like some sweet minute never meant to end it’s gone and I am all alone again" Oh, but, Martie, you are such a sweet musician and you are singing that moment here so well! Loved this.  ....jo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
So beautifully said....but we must remember that here in this paradise, we can choose to have seasons, or not. It's all up to us. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sigh |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Applause and a  Come read to me some poem, |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, Martie - this is simply lovely! We're never alone - we simply think we are - and the sweet moments will live forever. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Your words give inspiration to aspire to a higher level of writing, that which for you is an inherent part of who you are. So my eye can only look in admiration, and my heart in joy. take care, sweet poetess Liz |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
You've really become an expert at this stuff Martie....incredible write.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
All my skin was wind wise and in the place of feathers and questions I draped my sheer portent determined to close only clouds and ease into something that I don’t know yet =============================== good lordy I LOVE your personifications and imagery...time and time again you turn words into poetic perfection.  We go where there is love when ever we are lonely ... going back, we find, |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is simply amazing Martie, as is you. Sweet LadyI'm keeping it Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Geez how did I miss this? So glad it came back up. Martie, hon...you alone? Never gal, NEVER  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
something about this one sends a note of winter too your eyes see something hidden don't be afraid enjoyed your are as always ms martie |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hiya Martie and good morning You are a tremendous writer, able to keep the reader in suspense from beginning to end, with a story lesson...and I never tire of reading you....it's always such a thrilling experience to click on you. No, you are never alone...ever...and you have my number if need be. Take care dear friend, and sending good thoughts your way, for you and yours. Luv Me |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Martie .... This touched my love of trains, and rainy weather ..... and " ... sweet minutes never meant to end." Well done. Bob |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
The movements and images here are quite powerful - and moving - like autumn's changes ~P |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Even your title is pure poetry. *S* I read this... and read it again... from soar to sad settle... this is excellent!! |
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msflame Member
since 2002-05-21
Posts 188 |
This read like a soft breeze. Lovely. I do thank you! |
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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279 |
~oh just, reading and sighing and feeling small slivers of it myself these past days, like quiet whispers walking past. your writing is alive, something powerful enough to soak skin and heart. |
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elfine Junior Member
since 2004-06-08
Posts 35traveling |
I had to read and re-read this ... beautiful, the way you make us feel anticipation and then the closing and abandonment of winter. It doesn't trip lightly ... perfect for autumn, though. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
All my skin was wind wise and in the place of feathers and questions Good grief~you awe me lady. |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
You do have a way with words... always a pleasure to read and experience. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I am not sure how I missed this, but glad I finally read it. The seasons come and go and paint us all with unique strokes. *smile* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you know how to tug the heart-strings |
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