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Layered Meaning
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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 Layered meaning A candle in the dark opening shadows with their light Eyes that hold within wordless words a story’s never end Looking down into a mountain for the spirit of a child The flight of bird with unmoving wings riding waves of air Layered meaning The illusion of skin with fair and sweater across the nape of evening A kiss in closing down the goodnight into dreams that rock the bed to sleep |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - your artistry is so amazing - well guess when you have the talent you have it isn't so amazing but to someone like me it is such a joy to read and to travel with you through the layers of your writing - this is just great - Paul |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I don't know that this poem could have contained any more with any less... The picture complementing the words complimenting the layers... Will you adopt me?  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Your pen writes with the softness of candlelight. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
So gentle and good, like a spirit's touch beneath the stars....your heart is showing, dear lady.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
it was easy to get lost in this...i leaned forward into the screen as i read, and i didn't realized how wrapped up i was (or how close to the screen i was) til i took a breath to reply. wonderfully done, martie! a sweet and vivid journey. it's not that the future is near or far... the future's just so grim. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
The pic, the poem and you....all beautiful. great big  love you Martie Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am smiling so wide here. I love the title, and you worked an opposite metaphor with it too. Layered meaning, with this pic, and I recall all the geology lessons of sedimentary and..oh, well, I recall SOME of the geology lessons.  But I was asked just last week who was among my list of favored poets, and you, my friend were at the top of the list because of just this--layered meaning. I actually wondered if you knew that you strike subconscious chords with your choices of word phrases and how those choices resonate, like the wings of butterfly effect, reconciled only at some later time. (It makes me sit up and say "OH.".) I suspect you do know.  and I think you are a frigging genius.  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Eyes that hold within wordless words a story’s never end" *smile* |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Martie, yes layer upon layer of depth and meaning in your way of doing it....far beyond what we ourselves can. You are the best...and yes, the picture certainly complements the poem....looks kinda KalefornyAish.... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Nature at her finest, and you...depicting her every move, from the spirit world of her...an extremely beautiful poem |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Always glad to find Musings of your mind Lovely thoughts...KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Eyes that hold within wordless words a story’s never end Looking down into a mountain for the spirit of a child ========================= your layers are more lovely than my mere words will do just... but I can tell you both your spirit and hers are there between every perfect poetic line.  We go where there is love when ever we are lonely ... going back, we find, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is precious |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Martie, just dropped in to say I am absolutely never disappointed reading one word you write, ever! I think you hold the record for holding my attention. I simply am overwhelmed at how you see things, and write them, in awe actually. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sweet Martie, this....oh this, *deep sigh* Joining your others in the library ....jo |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Martie, "A candle in the dark opening shadows with their light". This is so true of your writing! Love it. Have a good week, Martie. miscellanea |
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msflame Member
since 2002-05-21
Posts 188 |
Uplifting verse and so in touch with my own spirit today. Thank you! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(smiling) |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Martie ... touching, as always. Bob |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
smiling and shaking my head.. yer amazing, ya know? Love this Martie gal. |
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