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Open Poetry #33

A Solecism

Masked Intruder

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since 1999-05-23

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Near golden sunsets

0 posted 2004-08-22 02:29 AM

Existence short, as is such,
Life will trick my eyes.

As hope soon fades
and I've lost touch,
the truth, of course, a lie;
I'll reach out,
with hope elapsed,
weak will mere instinct belies.

A long-frayed life line,
far beyond my sight,
bobs short among the waves.
And I, bereft, to drift and die,
too long lost for thoughts to save.

It has all begun to run afoul.
Night precedes a dying day.
I will follow, in unhallowed ground,
and inevitably slip away.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

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1 posted 2004-08-22 03:31 AM

You're in my head again.

Good to see you, even in there, though I fear for your safety as you plod about in my brain. *wince* lotsa clutter, so be careful!

And? you RHYMED.

gleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

stick around, will ya?

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

2 posted 2004-08-22 06:35 AM

Ah, MI...this hits home.
Well done, young man!

kayjay
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since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

3 posted 2004-08-22 07:53 AM

You paint a beautiful picture of somber thoughts indeed. Well written. KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

passing shadows
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displaced

4 posted 2004-08-22 12:53 PM

welcome home...you've been missed

good write, I can relate

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2004-08-22 01:21 PM

Oh my, dear Masked Intruded, indeed a solecism....maybe even a soulecism. I hope this is just musing. Yano, I've come to believe truths are duplicitous and so are lies. In the end....we have to walk a very fine line....you address so many philosophical questions in this short, unhappy verse. Hope you will have brighter days, Phil.

........jo

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