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Adonis Cross Junior Member
since 2003-04-07
Posts 46Miami, FL, USA |
As long as you and I remain The people we are now, My love for you can never wane, And no one else can hope to gain My adoration, or attain My heart with any vow. No matter who may come along Beseeching me to stray— No matter where she ranks among The others, how divine her song Of promises—my will is strong, And at your side I'll stay. You know I'll never change, my dear, And I can fully see The woman you are now and here Will never alter year to year... So I will suffer, since it's clear You're not in love with me. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh i didnt expect that ending...so beautifully written...then that last line made my heart fall!! wonderfully written..builds the reader up..then breaks hearts...the same as the subject enjoyed this  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I agree with Dawn .... I did not expect that ending line! Very well written piece. Hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
outstanding ending (for the poem not in real life). "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
poignant writing, very well written. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Well done, Adonis Cross. A great unrequited love write. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Alas...looks like they still haven't made that rule where two have to fall in love at the same time...therefore much pain and confusion...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome rhyme scheme! |
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