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Picture of a night scene (from open 22)
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Picture of a night scene (from open 22) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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August winds howl around your sleeping I sit at our window watching fields of space looking out for that fly-by passion of yours it never seems to show itself to me. I cannot bear to lay aloof and stare at this dream I am grieving while it awaits patiently for my leaving all wound up like the fat belly of a little Ben filled with alarm waiting waiting for that thievish hour when it steals me from you. I love you sometimes I don’t though you might find that incomprehensible it is true, I think. What does it matter if I love you or not my skin doesn’t get any warmer and it’s through nights like this one I wish I didn’t. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. ~Stevie Nicks~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
looking out for that fly-by passion of yours it never seems to show itself to me. I love you sometimes I don’t though you might find that incomprehensible it is true, I think. What does it matter if I love you or not my skin doesn’t get any warmer and it’s through nights like this one I wish I didn’t. your words spoke to me even if a repost~~~ M |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
"What does it matter if I love you or not my skin doesn’t get any warmer" this line... well.. it made me stop and think twice... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Maree, this leaves me wanting to go get my sweater....no really, I could just picture you looking out the window, with a full moon and a cold chill, wind, maybe storm, and then having these thoughts.  ....jo |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"I cannot bear to lay aloof and stare at this dream I am grieving while it awaits patiently for my leaving"  yes yes, this right here...thats how it feels! oh Maria, your repost is sooo touching, and bittersweet.....reaches deep into me. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd! that aches! |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
I spent the last month away trying to get my computer back up and running anticipating the opportunity to catch up on your posts as well as a few others that leave my jaw on the floor. Your talent never ceases to amaze me. Your feelings are well communicated as are the unforgettable pictures you so deftly paint. You have a refreshing way of writing that is very real and captivating. I always enjoy reading and watching for your posts. This one is a heartbreaker. I hope things have changed for you. I am glad you reposted it. I never would have had the opportunity to read it. It's brilliant as always. Warm regards, Big K |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
a picture removed from a picure... well done, little one. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I cannot bear to lay aloof and stare at this dream I am grieving while it awaits patiently for my leaving all wound up like the fat belly of a little Ben filled with alarm waiting waiting for that thievish hour when it steals me from you. profound detail from a deep passion...extremely well written, felt the anquish and yet, the hope of someday mutually meeting forever. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree As always your imagery paints emotion....and leaves me feeling your feeling. You are a gifted poet!  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
For one reason or another, I think this is one of your best Darksis. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thank you all, you're so very kind with your thoughts and comments, I appreciate them so much, Thanks for stopping by...even for a repost.  Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I'm afraid I can't help but tell you how very much I love this poem. Personally, I think it's the best you've written Maree. K |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I understand this one...curse them that I love at times and me for loving, just 'cause it hurts. (if that made sense) Love you, lovely, and thanks for the song.  |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
quote: * It's nice sometimes to open up the heart a little and let some hurt come in. It proves you're still alive. *rod mckuen  JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Love the ambiguity and depth of this one Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I love you sometimes I don’t though you might find that incomprehensible it is true, I think. What does it matter if I love you or not my skin doesn’t get any warmer and it’s through nights like this one I wish I didn’t. This aches...and resonates. Just these lines would make this poem a certain addition to my library....sad but beautiful and so true to life. Every line of this poem breathes with a life of its own...and I love little Ben, making his tinny threat every second of the night! ....but....I miss your picture...snif... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Said I would, then didn't...ain't that just like a man? Now I am -- Presto Librario! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Nice writing bella, you make ache beautiful |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
i can fully relate to ur words... the ongoing dilemma... its d exact thing i am going thru right now... i really liked this piece. "Who knows what evil lurks in the heart of Man?" |
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