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Drifting Apart
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Drifting Apart |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Driftin Apart one woman's blues your man comes home each night a routine lonely truth as you recall when he spent time with you. you keep longing for the love you once had you can remember when he was the man. now it's so hard to give him your heart yeah it's so hard cause you're driftin apart. you leave with some girlfriends it's a saturday night you drink a few to hide from your life but you're unhappy the clock's callin you home to a lonely place where you don't want to go. you keep gettin bold offers you prentend to decline ah here comes a new one the smilin happy kind. the bar room is full the action is quick you can't get around your mind's hidden wish. he's straight up and young he's treatin you right you decide to stay it's an early night. you hear him say things you love to hear the same things you heard for so many years. the moment's filled with magic you dance and you touch the perfect young stranger you want him so much. he fills the spaces where lonliness reels you're lost again wishin he was all you could feel. you know that it's wrong but you want it no less his lips receive your kiss he gives you his best your mind's whirling round his passion and youth has got your heart pumpin the old becomes new. you finally run for shelter you're own empty nest. everyone is sleepin but you still can't rest. how could you guess it escaped with your soul but truth or disguise you're not feelin so old. on with tommorrow back on routine time he'll still come home and pay you no mind. but you've got a secret you've never been untrue but you know the difference between hell and heaven's rules and it's so hard to give him your heart yeah it's so hard now you're drifin apart. Ain't doin nothin at all |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
oh my goodness! you have captured my inner thoughts very well! I can relate to this! Thanks for sharing - Roniece Dawson-Bruce |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Wow, would love to hear you singing this. A terrible situation, but you brought it to light... Well done. Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so much that is real within your words M |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Roniece, CG & Maureen I appreciate the comments and the fact that you could relate. Life can be cruel and kind all at the same time. Strange sometimes. Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ethome Wonderful lyrics that tells a true story. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Sounds like a song I can hear it in my mind, very well written.  "Dont cry because its over, smile because it happened. " |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Life is filled with so many variables... Timeless, from ages past...all still the same...the quest for happiness and feeling wanted...particularly as we age... Thanx Eric, you have done very well with this! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you know i love the blues  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I found this so very real Eric. As you wrote through the mind of the woman...I was so impressed at your insight. Human needs never vary, man to woman, or age to age...they just develope the ability to control the impulse, and the strength to return in wonder. Great write. TD |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Sy Good to hear from you glad you could see the truth in this piece. Whiskey....Glad you could hear this and thanks for the read and the response. Barry...So true what you're saying....Glad you could relate...I appreciate the comments. Passing...Yes, I know you love the blues and thanks for dropping in for a visit. TD...Those are very true words and I appreciate the comments. Ain't doin nothin at all |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I think this would describe a few million marriages or relationships quite accurately....James |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Enjoyed this insightful write! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I've seen this happen many times...and that's a fact. Great write!  .....jo |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
felt this one |
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