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Between the Because
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Between the Because |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Wake in your dreams to broken fire and water or the hands that held some kind of truth all this rain is lonely sketch these eyes black they stand before you lost looking for light shadows of butterflies will it matter who threw the first stone? it lands the same off your gray eyelids I looked back dust was rising from where we once danced delicate break once you loved me the thing about poetry it always finds a way to be still between the because writes and rewrites the seas points of release shapes chance before your soul leaves find the place we left once you loved me between the because I've tried so hard to tell myself that you're gone though you're still with me I've been alone all along..Now I'm bound by the life you left behind |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful and melancholic |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Greeneyes A moment in time. Well done. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Wake in your dreams to broken fire and water or the hands that held some kind of truth ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I looked back dust was rising from where we once danced delicate break once you loved me the thing about poetry it always finds a way to be still between the because writes and rewrites the seas points of release shapes chance before your soul leaves find the place we left once you loved me between the because ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ oh sweetie..the emotions in this rise off the page... endings are the hardest thing we ever do...and ironically, usually inspire some of our best writing... the thing about poetry it always finds a way to be still between the because writes and rewrites the seas points of release shapes chance *hugging you* .... write your self a happy ending sweets..I know its definately your turn...you are due.   |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
hugs for you L. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
between the because love the title and everything in between... *s M |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
the thing about poetry it always finds a way to be still between the because ~*~ Lauren, we've said a number of times, "this is your best," and you keep upping the high vault line... well, you just upped it again. Wow! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"will it matter who threw the first stone? it lands the same off your gray eyelids I looked back dust was rising from where we once danced delicate break once you loved me the thing about poetry it always finds a way to be still between the because" What could I possibly say that this doesn't already express. Pure pain is hard to follow... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Because does give birth to both ends of love. The beginning and the end of... You have written a beauty here Lauren...loved your imagery....excellent, and the mood so well conveyed.. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Stunning write. TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"before your soul leaves find the place we left once you loved me between the because" Lauren, this was so profound. Lovely penning.  ...jo |
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Contabo Member
since 2001-11-21
Posts 159 |
at least someone here can consistently post poetic musings and do so in a creative manner. I read ALL your poetry. even when I am in a bad mood. Contabo |
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