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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Tell me what you think of this; I'm trying to decide whether to let it take me somewhere, or stop right here so the reader and I can go wherever we might dream. the morning to arise it echoes down the tracks its mournful wandering cries. ©August 2004 Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Feedback? For what my uneducated opinion is worth, I vote expand. I, especially, liked the first two lines! miscellanea |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
sometimes the greatest wisdom ever expressed is what is not said or written.. VAS.. either way it is meaningful.. im sure there is a wonderful way to add to it without losing the message cool beans |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This beauty is self contained. A poem in and of itself. To embrace it with a larger view, simply clothes in fine apparel a beautiful body. Smiling at you. TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Beautiful as is, and I would like more if you give us more. It's like the beginning of a story and the wind can wander or you can help us. Your choice.  ...jo |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Sometimes the most beautiful poems are the small ones.  I like it.Cold hands means a warm heart |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good as it is but if there's more, then by all means, continue |
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