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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I should not have spoke so soon pebble words in tumble grin and fairies flailing awkward tune as if a bit of paper wept in the swirl of "thatta girl" acids in a pool of whirl I-hate-myself-for-this-you-know Oh, I knew it was a joke-- pinch me? I was close this time. this-time-next-time-last-time *laugh* Last time, I said, "next time-- won't". * * * The petals of the daisy danced as the genie tapped his wrist on his magic hand of path mocking clock's insistance with the lure of anything I'd want "two more wishes" (too much taunt) for me to ever feel at ease last-time-that-time-this-time "please." "For a game of chess?" I begged itching time and company thinking-drinking-thinking-plead chivalry in face of greed as my curiosity revealed to him my need: "Two lone kings are you and I, dancing on the black and whites--" "You are not the Queen?" he smiled (placing me in check) I filed the 'tells' of all his posturing for future reference as I made the mandatory queu... that-time-this-time-next-time? "you"... which-time-my time "it's your move" wishing there were more to us than tap-tap-dancing checkboard blues. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
just goes to prove, when it all comes down to brass tactics...life is 'not' a game, or shouldn't be...always someone gets hurt. this was outstanding...the rhyme and rhythum...perfect...not to mention, the imagry of concept...very very good |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You are amazing! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Kari already said it, but damn Karen, you ARE amazing. Hugs! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Excellent write, my friend... jwesley |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Quote from a comming poem "My double crown of laugh and frown."  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed this much  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
LOL...very well done sweets..... You poor gals always get the blues of some sort....like them OBG-Why-Me Blues?..... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
sometimes if it werent for the game, we wouldnt find the pleasure we think we would be getting....umm..basically tapdancing makes a spectacular show, and may even leave you with sore feet...but without the dance and music...ya just left standing..still.. and maybe a little bored then again, i never did win a game of chess maybe i took the wrong approach  love this |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
this-time-this-one-poem-shelved-done-well  .....jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yep...I understand |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
To bent head with smoke which curled round the wisps of hair as if indeed the fire within was about to burst I spoke Low toned in whisper almost "to move the pieces cross this haze," and paused to draw my own lit one and wait for you to look up "Is to know there is an end yet no end to what is possible." You smiled puzzled sympathy perhaps and spoke these words "Linear is the game, but you know the end comes from the choice of move." and bent your head again to move a bishop against my king with one single word "Check" I smiled inside and simply let the board in black and white remain while I rose and turned my back on it to face the window's rain "If I should move my queen to defend the throne then bishop takes her quick" "Then knight takes bishop against his will" and the queen of yours take mounted sir and king takes queen to end this gambit across the squares" "But if the King move one space left and you counter with your pawn" "The game is yours my dear" and we... could share coming dawn" You again with quizzical smile looked up at me and spoke "Mate will do" "Till we set the game" Next time.... [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (08-13-2004 06:35 PM).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well now I am truly speechless. Hey Ron, loved this ditty ~ spome the words Were it not for the game, you could never learn how to win yanno? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile...Karen adds another thing to her list of things of "NOT to do with Cpat Hair". Then she underscores a few items on her list of things "TO do with Cpat Hair."  *shaking my head and chuckling* You, sir, are quite the fencing partner. Yep, you are, and one of these days...  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and ooops...I was so distracted by the Cap showing up like that I forgot to thank you all for reading! Thank you.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Don't you know? "everything's alright, yes...everything's fine" Let's go to the opera m'lady...  You're absolutely astonishing  Thank you Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
WOW  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*huge moth grin* me thinks its time for you and the Capt to DUET...yayayayaya awesome write Sen...and the poetry reply is perfect. I'll crown both of ya. I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*chuckle* I thought we just did! (He just likes to have the last word.) *neener neener neener* to Cap with *winks* to Jan! thanks you and Cap? WORD! |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Chess was always my favorite! They say it's something about my methodical and destructive nature... but m'self, I say it's the blues  Love readin ya lady Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"wishing there were more to us than tap-tap-dancing checkboard blues." I'm laughing at one of us, or all of us. Great write K, Ron... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ser, you are good at rambles....and you have used a scattergun with this one... Nice one ... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) LAST WORD |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yer lucky yer cute |
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